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the future isn't bright for now.

We don't look innocent-
            But guilty isn't fitting






Filth surrounds the light
To contrast what we find is highest.
            but tell me, sister dear; is this right?

Love elapses over time
        To wrap theirselves round
What hearts cannot resolute

                         







The color of our eyes are bleak.
                  Not of black and weak; but rather




Blue and deceitful.


(is this what you were waiting for?  because obviously it's never coming.)

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  • glenn shannon silver member
    September 28
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    very interesting indeed i enjoyed the darkness behind this cool


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    September 28

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    you penned this just fine
    loved the way you took the prompt
    and made it yours, bright the light
    they were looking for thank you for penning
    for me Hugs Angel♥


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    September 28
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    Very beautiful work. I love the format, takes the reader for a ride
    Good luck!

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