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Anticipation

 

 

~waiting~
time stood idle
moments felt grim,
morn greets twilight
hope hides deep sorrow,
her given strength prevails
dreams embracing fortitude,
for yearning; she's held closely
~anticipating~
closely held, she's yearning for
fortitude, embracing dreams
prevails strength given her-
sorrow deep, hides hope,
twilight greets morn
grim felt moments-
idle stood time
~waiting~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Your write must read forwards & backwards in same order of word usage....
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/palindrome.html

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  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 17

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    excellent

    Wow
    Really enjoyed this
    I have yet to do this form...
    Looks hard to me...and also with rhyme
    Congrats on the Bronze trophy
    Hugs
    Susan~~~


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 12
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    Told you this was wonderful Congratulations on yout well deserved trophy


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      October 12
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      Thank you Gaylene..He's right though, I need to work on it the flow more. It was my first attempt but now it's another form added to those I enjoy trying. YOU are the master/mistress? of form however! lol


  • Arkbear gold member
    October 12

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    Mmmmm....gorgeous Palindrone....you just knocked someone out of Bronze....OUCH!  Let's hope it sticks, as I have ( 1 ) entry to go

     

    The ONLY thing I am going to critique here.....is you use each L as its' own source of info......in the next Palindrone Contest I Host.....Try to wrap your thoughts around to the next L and Challenge your brain even more.....other than that.....excellent write and BEST Aesthetics in this Contest......so far

     

    Good luck!

     

     

    Bear -

    • Carolina Moon gold member
      October 12
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      Thanks for the advice as well as the bronze. It was a challenging and fun contest. I shall be polishing up my Palindrome skills!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 30

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    Nice job. I like the poem. I cannot imagine trying to do this in rhyme. It is a very interesting form and you did a great job.

    Mike

    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 30
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      Thanks Chuckers..doing this in rhyme would smoke your brain for sure..if it's even possible..go on, try it hehe It's a difficult form (for me) but lotsa fun.


  • PoetessA.L.OPrunty
    September 30

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    Brilliant Carolina!

    Applauds! Laurels! Bravo's...Loved the form and flow in both directions. Your work never ceases to amaze me!

    A. L. O'Prunty


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 30
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      You are too kind, thank you so much. I truly appreciate your comment.


  • individuality gold member
    September 29

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    i will come back to this poem when i am sober and i can se, at the moment even with one eye closed and my fat face close to he screen, i can not rwad it so i will return in the morning.


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 29
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      lol At least someone is having a good time Watch out for those hangovers.


  • breedluv gold member
    September 29

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    This is brilliant! The poem reads well in both directions and the form is very......pretty. I enjoyed the read, and good luck in the contest. Well done!

    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 29
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      Thank you! ....now it's your turn to try this form hehe You'll have lots of fun, just remember to take 2 aspirin first lol

      Linda


  • Ez Writer silver member
    September 28

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    A fabulous write Linda !! A wonderful
    job on this form , thank you for sharing
    it was a joy to read on this night !!
    Best always & hugs , Easy

    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 28
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      Aww Easy, you are always so sweet with your comments. Thank you young man..I enjoyed the challenge..though now I'm bracing myself for Bear's critique lol


  • Haygood gold member
    September 28

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    It is a tough form. You did good for the most part. I do question the part; twilight greets morn and morn greets twilight. Twilight is evening and never touches morn.
    I just don't see that part. Other than that, you did good with a hard form. Good luck in the contest.

    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 28
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      I used those phrases in reference to her waiting in vain..as in all day..or days..It's written from a rather personal circumstance..and in that, perhaps makes sense only to me. I'm sorry for any confusion reading my scribblings and I truly appreciate your honest critique.

      Linda

  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    September 28

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    This is excellent! You have written a wonderful palindrome here. Gosh they are hard! You will do very well methinks. Best wishes in the contest


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 28
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      Yes Ma'am it sure was difficult...but heck, if at first ya don't succeed.. give up Lol


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 28

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    Wow!! I am truely impressed! What a beautiful Palindrome you have written here! Outstanding in it's form and just gorgeous in it's content.

    Bravo Sis


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 28
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      Aww Thank you m'dear..I sure had fun trying it. But damn, it was hard hehe


  • StarEyes
    September 28

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    I soooooo agree with my brother here!!! Even I am not brave enough to try this form and they say I am pretty good with forms I love this! I love the form, I love the read and the message! Great job!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 28
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      Thanks Nettie I love the form as well and wanted to try it out. Maybe I should have thought twice. lol


  • John BoSox
    September 28

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    Tough prompt..Difficult rules to obey, as well as format..You did well..wow.This is not easy..congrats..you nailed it.You should win a trophy..or there is no justice..That is my take

    I loved it...everyone should


    John

    • Carolina Moon gold member
      September 28
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      Thank you for your support and encouragement. This is my first attempt, but gotta love a challenge. Not sure if I did it correctly, but I had fun..and that's all that really matters...right? Right!

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