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Noiresque

I met him
during a short stay
on Easy Street,
a real lady killer.
Not the kind
you'd imagine
I'd fall for...

He was real smart

...I mean book smart,
with a tough shell
and a soft underbelly.
And cool...so cool.
He always looked like
he could fit in anywhere,
right at home with the
real gents, but he
could handle himself
with the regular guys, too.

.

.

.

.

.

.

Not that he was a regular guy.

This one stepped out of a

story book.

And, man, didn't I want

to be his princess.
A girl like me
didn't stand a chance.
He was irresistible.
We were together for

a while.  It was nice.

 

He treated me like a lady.

Paid me compliments,

spoke to me real sweet-like,

and made love to me like

it was me lying there...

not just any dame...me!

Not like the jerks I always knew.

But you know the routine.

Just...didn't...work out.

It wasn't him.

It was me. 

Like usual.

 

He was a real Park Avenue doll.

I even think he loved me

a little...

me...

can you imagine?

 

 

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  • SteveS gold member
    October 27

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    Very Lauren Bacall! This is really cool when read aloud, which is why it is performance poetry...see how quickly I catch on.


    • Camille Morin gold member
      October 27
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      Exactement. It needs that low, dusky, Cathy Moriarty-type of voice, sort of dark and cool. Glad you like it!

      Love,
      Camille


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 29

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    performance poetry nailed - this just calls out for to be acted as a monologue. the mood you capture and the voice assumed transport to vivid images already tied in our minds. i see some great potential to play with this piece live.

    well done.


    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 29
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      Me, too, Rick! I have a couple of other character pieces like this that I love to perform. This one will be fun. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I'm afraid that some people didn't understand it to be for performance.

      Love,
      Camille


  • Rheea gold member
    September 29

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    ah ah ah you are good with this  girl very good..Could see the tight dress and hear the heels clicking on out into that smoking bar to drink and think showing some leg cause that's just the way that girl is.

  • Tercarro
    September 28

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    Brilliant

    I felt it all and the mood took me right to that place, right to the middle of it all. Loved it and the accent too.

    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 28
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      Thank you, my Darling, I cannot WAIT to perform this one.

      Love,
      Camille


  • katie marie silver member
    September 28

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    Perfect background for this Camille. Adds to the visualization.


  • tomisb
    September 28

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    The crusade of esteem, ... don't know what I mean? I use to be the guy that broke up with the one everyone wanted to date because I knew that fate intended her for someone far better than me. I didn't know that I had my head up my dark space.

    "I think too much
    but there is something wrong
    there is something here that doesn't last too long."
    -- Todd Rundgren "Hello It's Me"

    You capture it from the feminine side so well. The spell of "woe is me" that requires the loser to leave. We are only losers because we describe ourselves that way. 'nuff said.

    Love,
    Tom B.


    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 28
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      I think it is going to make for a great performance piece, but I do know what you are saying. Thank you, my friend.

      Love,
      Camille

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