and again, war is raging
because a few victims more or less don't matter
the only fatal thing would be giving in;
being weaker than the enemy
each victim is only a digit
part of a large statistic of success
necessary for the "greater good"
the easiest way has always been
leaving the people to suffer and die alone
in a war meant to ensure "peace"
another attack;
another amount of casualties
that don't matter
another attempt to subdue the "unpeaceful" world
A contest entry
- and I started my poem with the word 'and' by Virgoan.
1500 points, ended October 10, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrite q u i c k i e! HURRY! by Kathraina.
460 points, ended October 26, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Came here to return the favour
Good grief young lady - you have wrtten a truth here for sure - when General Franks was asked how many civilians died in the Iraq war his answer was "We don't do body counts" - perhaps you should read my poem - "Gonna Study War Some More" - or my poem "Peace" -
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Thank you for commenting! I will look up these poems you mentioned when I get around to it.
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Wow, very profound words here. I love your thoughts, they go deep and cause the reader to sit back and ponder them a bit. Great job!
bravo and thank you for entering
♥ kate -
OMG, I didn't read the other poems in that contest - but I do think you would have deserved a gold trophy for this one, it is so awesome. It really touches me; it reaches right through my skin and for my heart, if you know what I mean.
It is so brutally true, yet the words are wonderfully chosen.
It is just my opinion and I am convinced that many people should read this and start thinking - and caring.
Thank you so much for sharing!
You dear one
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I'm honored by your words, thank you!
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The intention is really good and you were able to express your mind willingfully. I like how you press your opinion, interpolating us the readers. Nicely done.
On a personal note, I suggest that the words capitalized shoul just be stated in lower case. Strong understatement is always encourage to reflect a subtle yet more convincing and powerful output.
Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Regards,
Hensley
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Thank you for commenting. I wasn't sure about whether to capitalize or not... And what do you think: If I use lower case instead, should I leave the words spaced out or not?
Annie
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I suggest you remove the space. The natural effect of the poem will illuminate.
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Thanks.
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what a
good poem and I like the angle you came from. You are right too...war for ther sake of peace, does seem a contradiction in terms. good luck with the contest. I thought this was a really good poem.
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Drama unfolds in your well chosen words. If good people remained good people after they gained office, we would not suffer so. We spin in the wind waiting for each day and wonder why evil prevails.
Well penned, good poet.
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