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amber leaves rain - haiku

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amber leaves rain
hickory bombs blast
winter winks

 

 

 

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image taken from http://www.artmeister.com/images4/la126%20-%20HickorySummerleaves_L.JPG

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  • brokenpoet
    October 1
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    I LOVE IT!


  • Denerica
    September 28
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    Delightful...the ending with winter blinking. Excellent haiku. Blessings.


  • Peteskid gold member
    September 28

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    I like the first two lines a lot...amber rains..great capture of an image there, and hickory bombs..yes, i have been hit in the head by a few hickory nuts in my day...Very good images there. I think line three could be better if it did not personify winter, more of a haiku image like the first two very good lines.Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK


    • thelordreigns gold member
      September 28
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      Thank you Peteskid. I am so enjoying this autumn day here in CT! The moment I was trying to catch was the one where I am so enthralled with the season but just can't ignore the reality that winter is lurking in the shadows.....(I hate that cold, freezing season most of the time..... and I dread that it is coming) So instead of that impending doomish feeling, I made light of it in the last line. I guess it doesn't work because it isn't true!