it is time to talk
to the artist
he continues to rise
in thoughts
the last time they met
he kissed her cheek
in parting
the sensation of his bristled jaw
still lingers on her skin
she wants to explore his obsessions
his penchant for impermanence in art
the energy in his hands
he always slips
suggestion into conversation
says they should run off
for a weekend
Author notes
writing a poem a day for seven days - this is day five
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YOu have a wonderful way with words
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Like your opening line, I guess because I am artsy myself...You pull us in with this
and her curiosity about him...Intriguing write!
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I have a feeling..
...that you may be capable of the superb - this was not it, and I see that quantity may be gettingin the way of quality. Perhaps being a man does not help. Yet it is good...
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you never fail to just make me sit here going damn
his penchant for impermanence in art
i liked that especially, it really hit me in the trombone
that ending, had the whole sense of this is the end...and the beginning
i dug this, it's a garden
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he never fails to satisfy...
ydk
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I should almost start a list.
back atcha
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I like what I would call documentary poems- an honest thought or sentiment, clearly and simply put.
I have much less patience for poems that try to be too clever with their words.
There are just too many people trying to be too clever these days. Someone should tell them all to shutup.
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a poem is a sensation, like the bristled jaw line, it has substance and feeling
very good mrs richards.. yes
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lol. that is some suggestion...
i love the energy in his hands...i love the energy of this poem. yes, sometimes people like this do awaken our muse, don't they? i think sometimes, that it is a 'poetic' person that can only do this.. wonderful poetry Jan. i enjoyed this one a lot.
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"the sensation of his bristled jaw
still lingers on her skin"
i love that feeling, still thinking about the last time that happened. Excellent...
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i need to go back and read 1-4.. you are on a roll
very good..
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I think you read one and two, three and four weren't posted.
thanks
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Although I hardly know your circumstances, Jan...I'd say, pack a bag. 
Yay for day five, Scribe.
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Romantic with some nostalgia mixed in it, don't ask me why I think that way...a sentimental journey you take the reader on. Well done. Blessings.
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