Oh diamonds in my pillow,precious apples of my eye
this heart may weep like willow,should life not make you high
planning paths through bend and narrow,smoke plumed thoughts of constant stream
turning all precise as harrow,for safe passage to all you dream
as shared journey of mirrored recall,help colour memories kaleidoscope
may love and patience guide us all,towards peaceful bodes of desired hope
shedding tears upon your birth,in my arms lifes perfect gift
your arrival increased my worth,all previous importance cast adrift
through you I found myself,and why we live this life
to learn to love myself
my babies
and my wife
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Fatherhood
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About your Child!
A Beautiful read once more, uplifting and spiritual, clearly this was a life changing event for you! congratulations! this is something to show your children one day for sure, it will very clearly express your spiritual, and emotional attachment to them as it is open and clear as it should be from father to daughter, or son.
song you my like, Zoe Jane, by Staind, very similar, but more about being absent.
your rhyming is fragmented and abstract slightly, but still fitting, i like the style!
i also enjoy that your poems are expressing very VERY different themes! this shows progression in your character and mentality, progression, change, for the better,
wow this is uplifting and beautiful,
one piece of advice!
you already write with your heart,
dont think badly, about your own art,
its as beautiful as your changing self.
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great song
always thought "been a while" spoke straight to me....look what you've done,now I have d/l all their songs to find more treasure
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Your love is expressed very strongly throughout this poem. It really brings tears to my eyes. The rhyme and flow are excellent.
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beautiful response
all authors try to evoke emotion,thanks so much for your kind response
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This is so beautiful, it is not often enough that we read of a father's love so passionately and it made me smile. Beautifully crafted. best to you poet
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and there it is!!!!!
"it made me smile" .........thank you thank you thank you.....and you made me smile
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Just another great poem, with great rhyme something I don’t see a lot of, and a great message… really enjoyed reading this... think ill be back for more reads.. Keep up the good writing…. Love the end too, very sweet
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thanks again
really pumped that you enjoyed the two you've read,thanks so much for your positive encouragement.....please be warned,I hit a brick wall this year,starting poetry got me through,my early writes may be ...umm.....not so nice.....cheers anyway
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It all begins with Father...so on time and right on
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cheers to you
thanks for reading.....so on time and right on....I bet you smile alot ;0)
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Aww.. what a beautiful expression of a father's love. There can be no greater thing. Not having this kind of relationship with my own father, I can appreciate those who work hard to have it. Lovely write.
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thank you so much
thanks for taking the time to read and comment in such a positive manner,it seems we had similar fathers,not too similar I hope for mine now resides with the devil,but he did teach me how not to treat a child,perhaps I should be thankful for small mercys.......or not haha......cheers to you though ;0) -
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Sounds like we did.. though mine's still living with the devil.. and my step father.. funny isn't it! I'm glad you had the strength to go the opposite way
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