Let the silent breath of night,
touch soured organs,
as gravity feeds the vacancy
between ideals and truth.
Let the essence of the world,
seep into every closed pore,
as the stars speak in whispers
to your rarely un-pained ears.
Trust becomes the only promise
not reduced to dust on a pillow,
with words turning to fire at your feet;
the curse of misery finding company.
When hearts are left to echo
against the walls of treachery,
the haemorrhage that follows,
is like pulling teeth from the folds of burden.
The only peace amongst such chaos,
is to wait beneath the moon;
watching daffodils smile at dusk.
Author notes
I suppose this is some-what reflective of a darker chapter in my life. I guess we have all been there at some point.
A contest entry
- BWOM~~~Best Write of the Month~~#6 by islekine.
1050 points, ended October 2, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I appreciate sincerity and type-o spotting over flattery
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I liked this poem.
Trust, indeed, the only thing one can do walking in the dark.
I liked the last stanza:
'The only peace amongst such chaos,
is to wait beneath the moon;
watching daffodils smile at dusk.'
how true it is.
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The emotional pain of depression too often manifests itself physically. A sensory overload in the negative so opressive that something as simple as a daffodil can become a beacon of light in a dark tunnel. Excelent poem you have written here and well deserving of the Gold.
Bill
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yup, we've all been 'there'....in fact, some people LIVE 'there'....lol
Love the wording and depth in this, and the ending was great!
Nice job! Definitely one of my favorites so far
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Ahhhh....
....I love the ending...and I love ...."the curse of misery finding company" A wonderful entry! Very deep...sad...yet hopeful...thanks for sharing your talent again!
Be well...and blessed...Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on...
and
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This is just great I have found my favorite for this contest I think lol thanks for taking the time to enter our contest with this amazing piece best wishes always be well.
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This is brilliant. The metaphor is amazing and the emotion is just what I always expect from your poen. You never dissapoint the reader, Cuz
Ty for being you
Lynda
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I think you have dug deep to create this poem nephew. It shows me a part of yourself that you like to keep tucked away and you know though, the last verse leaves the door wide open to better days. Thanks for sharing this dear. Love you lots and good luck in the contest.
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yes we all have been there, so you're not alone. though it may feel like it, you're not. I always used to tell everyone, when you think you're alone, look around. even though you may not see anyone, there is someone always there it's full of imagery, though it's sad and dark, which often reflects how the poet feels. we say that we don't often write about us, but I have come to understand that there is a little part of us in everything that we write. I love the last line, there is hope. which is a good thing, hold onto that Daddy.
good luck
Kat
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Excellent
Wow, such a great use of image. You capture the feelings so masterfully. Best of luck in the contest
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