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Hanging in a Cyber-dimension on Tuesdays and Thursdays

Missing image

October falls

like translucent spirits

seated around definitions

outlined by devotion

as musical chairs rotate

like obsessive compulsive

spells in spite of constant

secrets lodged deep between grooves of wood


gray words fade

behind tight-clenched eyes

and hard angles become obscure

with evocative images

settling like a fine coat of ash


I seem to be

lost in the beginning of the end

sitting in dark remnants

to honor their presence

I want to reach for something solid

something with meaning

substance inside rhythm


can God see my intentions from heaven

or does He sit on my shoulder

and mock my very existence

explaining what it is like to be

- me


I already know the words to my next poem

kinda abstract

with many different shades

insignificant and flat inside November

as it hangs in this cyber-dimension

and pounds metaphor into

Tuesdays and Thursdays


I don't think I belong anywhere

I am an afterlife of something once solid

like manipulated words cut into thirds

I want to postpone tomorrow

here amid universe central

listen to the static as it sizzles

spin another story waiting to be told

and simply rearrange December

 

BecZ 9/27/09


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Prompt: http://unpiano.com/music/wp-content/uploads/2008/09/rain45.jpg

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  • tara wilson gold member
    October 3
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    "October falls
    like translucent spirits "

    i love that..

    a pleasure...


  • sgking123 gold member
    October 3

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    wow

    your quest for something solid inside of ya and before you arrived at this rather 'soft state' is laudable....this made me think so hard that I had to smile by the end I came to the lsat line......this one pregnant with meaning......loved it.....dear


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 29

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    "with secrets lodged deep between grooves of wood"

    "gray words usually fade"

    "in an obligatory moment, harsh and prickly"

    "and pounds metaphor into November"

    These specific lines seem to encompass, even embellish, the dreary mood that drifts throughout this piece, Becky, much like a cold rainy day seeping into our bones, leaving us floating on fog and memories. It's a pensive piece, but a well-written one, with much to savor throughout. And I'm quite sure you're not alone in having felt this way. I know I have, more than once. Thank you for entering my contest, Sweetie. Good luck.