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City Limits




He drives naked
in his dirty Dodge Ram Dass
Tarzan boy with his lioness cub
wild shades of pink sliding down
through a sky of brilliant lapis -
(her fingers curled between his legs)
favouring the naturalness of her beauty
so unlike the neon bodies of silicon philosophy
cocooned in a safe unthinking world

Try the radio again -
nothing but the same 15 songs
played over and over
from one radio station to another
from one suburb to another...
nothing but static and evangelicals -
UFO sightings, a prophet proselytizing
Haitian ball players who practice voodoo

Impatient to get there -
to that slice of the timeless, limitless city
a place that he knows is his -
scrub pine half dead
gasping, reaching up through wasteland
has become his talisman, his totem -
he sends a glance to heaven,
before kissing her slick fingers
hand slap to the windshield -
pushing the needle
as the faraway stars rotate, oblivious

Brimming an overpass,
dead black lakes brooding on either side -
(she likes the wet sound of the tires
as they transfer from asphalt to concrete
and back to asphalt again)
headlights carve a tunnel of radiance
stark lights, like giant creature orbs
bounce off superstructures -
the wheel rattles and shakes in his hands

Jade-gold street dust rises
from backseat communion
settling over everything -
an idea grows without realisation
adding its naked glow to what is already seen
drawn
into the middle of sentences
wanting to keep going, phrase for phrase
grinding out the sinuosities of syntax
unfolding like skin and limbs –
caught up in the throbbing heat of language
a seduction to which, bone on bone
they succumb, feeling the words swell
and take shape in their throats
with a sudden release of orgasmic rapture
the sweetness of freedom
           tasted on one-another's tongue...








 

 

 





City Limits
©crisstiena

Author notes

...with a little help from a friend

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  • Night Hope gold member
    September 28

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    Your second line was just too cute, too prosaic and too profound for mere words, Sweetie. The rest of it...Sighhh. Stellar, as always. Best of luck in the contest, my Friend.



  • Balldinger silver member
    September 28

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    Stick Shift

    nothing like the thrill of the open road. what a lucky friend... and Haitian voodoo-practicing ball players to boot! If I weren't so wrapped up in the mundanity of survival in an open-door cage, I'd be driving right now... you spill verbiage well on the open black top..

    ~ EZB


  • Sonja
    September 28

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    Well, this one makes me to think of my own riding roads, lol... oh, sweet, sweet memories... Well done, well done... It is not easy to drive with busy fingers I like to write this kind of poetry myself


  • ccawley gold member
    September 28

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    My first impression...I was there and it was living.
    Love the last two lines along with so many others...
    You're awesome!!

  • Rowan gold member
    September 27
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    What a ride. I know this is why you're one of my favorites.

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