"I tried to be perfect, but nothing was worth it."
We gaze at the speckled ceiling,
and it's frustrating how there are no stars,
but the dimly lit room
is conducive for romance to leak from the walls,
and we sit
side by side,
[alone]
with piano haunting my thoughts,
and I'm closer,
I'm closer in more ways than one,
and I like it,
I like you,
because you're the unconventional beauty,
the kind we talked about,
you're the boy who thinks things through,
you're the boy who means what he says,
you're the boy who tells me sweet nothings,
and the boy who makes me smile,
but that's just it.
You're the boy who has it all,
but also the boy
who I can't have.
And we lay,
side by side,
piano haunting my thoughts,
and we whisper confessions of humanity to each other,
and I'm nervous,
but I'm sick of listening to logic,
because logic only frustrates me,
so my skin tumbles
and my bones fall,
and I give in to emotion,
and after all was said and done,
all I had left,
was the fact that my pillow smells like you.
And I hate it.
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I like this a lot. Especially the lyrics at the beginning.
You are succcchh a good writer
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I'm glad you like the part I didn't write. ;D
ahah.
Awe, thanks. :3
I felt like this was so random and uninspired. D:
It's just.. something that I had to write.
But I didn't feel like it was great.
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks. <3
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We gaze at the speckled ceiling,
-ooohhohohohoohhhh. that works SO well with the dialogue. damn, it just sets the perfect awkwardness.
with piano haunting my thoughts
-this sounds a little strange and offkilter. i like the idea and i like the word 'haunting', but the use of 'piano' struck me as if it was missing something.
HOLY SHIT THE ENDING IS FREAKING BRILLIANT.
from "so my skin tumbles" onwards is A-FUCKING-MAZING
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Oh, and lol,
btw,
the ceiling,
it's one of those nasty like, cielings that are all bumpy, and look like cottage cheese.
I can't remember the term for it. lol. -
Ahah, I'm so glad you liked this, because I really didn't.
It felt so boring and plain to me,
but at the same time, the situation it was about was awkward,
so I just had to write it simple,
with no elegance. I don't know.
I agree.
Piano feels like there should be a 'the' or something there. But at the same time,
'the' makes it seems like there's a piano in the room or something,
when it was just music through an ipod. lol.
Awe. Again,
I'm glad you liked it. (:
Thanks. <3
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