It feels like I'm stuck in between heaven and hell,
angels and demons at war,
ripping off wings and horns,
my souls being torn,
dark forces are being born,
all i see are creatures of different realms and those of night,
no one around me can see my fright,
so to save may life and sanity i must fight,
stuck in this never ending abyss,
dark hellish pit,
where I'm wishing Devils and demons didn't exist,
i can no longer persist,
so i give up and get on my knees take the claw of a demon and slice my wrist.
A contest entry
- Prewrites :) Yes, as many as you like, but hell this wont be simple. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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What did you think
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This was dark and good. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.
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Haunting
A rather dark piece that speaks of great courage on part of the author. Always in life there is light intermingled with the anguish and I wish this poem had hinted on some of this and perhaps finished on a more positive note. However for me is a strong and very visual verse.
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hi...
well i just read a couple of your pieces and i want to find time later to look closer at your stuff. my comment so far is that i really like the first 3 lines to My World...there's really something to build on here...why's it good?...hmm, not sure but u definitely keep things quiet in this opening and then get to the more blatant, hard words after line 3/4. thats good too but the first 3 lines really bite. merci, cool as heck. i'm from a songwriting background too (soca music) and poetry is a really good way to sharpen technique, get the best, quickest images etc. happy days. keep touch. sunday.
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Wow I am so impressed, it is an inner battle and sadly a battle shared by many. well done i love it!
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So very sad. Speaks of the inner struggle many face. I had this kind of battle for close to 20 years... so I can absolutely relate!
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This is a good poem, but it isn't a dirty pretty poem...check the other poems in the contest and you will see what dirty pretty is and maybe write a new one in that style...removing this one...sorries...
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Wow, this is pretty deep and sad. That's a terrible position to find yourself in. I love the imagery in this. One thing I can say is to never give up and let it all envelope you like that. Great work and good luck to you in this contest!
Jeremy0826
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