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through my magnifying glass;

you've thinned and left a trail-
a certain essence that i've failed to notice,
while you were in my presence.

you departed
left me feeling nostalgic

you were my home.


you shine
radiating elegance
not to mention your strictly arched back,
broad shoulders,
your chin peeling itself from your neck.

fluorescent

like the angel you are.

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  • WonderfulDreamz
    November 2, 2009

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    Loved It!! :)

    This is awesome!
    I really Loved..
    U did an really amazing job...
    You are awesome..
    Wish i could write as good as you!! : )


  • LilPoopyPoops
    September 27, 2009

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    prettyyyy and mysterious. it's too short. you should add to it because it ends too quickly i think