Verse #1
An ocean away, but I hold you still,
A young man’s decay calls me to the frontlines
Home is fading further again, but I must serve my deeds,
And the thought that this could be our last goodbye, it brings me to my knees
I’ll find my way, with this picture of your face,
My only soul shelter, this compass in a frame
So many have gone before me, I pray to God they’ve gone without me,
Because to leave before my time, would be to leave without goodbye
Chorus
Now the tears come a floodin’, and my hope is a gunnin’,
To make it home to her
And I know my hands are bloody, every man was somebody,
But from where I’ve gone, I will return
Verse #2
Death all around me, back and forth, the struggle carries on
My mind is heavy, but my heart is beating strong
Men are falling all around, ‘cept the middle where I stand,
And every hope and dream, joins them in the sand
Oh, I see it coming in,
Closer, to relieve me of my sins
I tell you, if I leave you must be strong,
I feel you; but my heart must walk along
Chorus
Now the tears come a floodin’, and my hope is a gunnin’,
To make it home to her
And I know my hands are bloody, every man was somebody,
Bridge
And I, I pray for the best, but fear the worst I must confess,
And I, I feel it’s the time, but in my absence, please I beg you, do not cry
Chorus
Now the tears come a floodin’, ’cause my hope is a runnin’,
I’ve made it home to her
Now I’m carried by my brothers, but I’ve gone to join the others,
From where I’ve gone, there’s no return
(I’ll be watching over you, I’ll hold you still)
Author notes
A song about a soldier's life and death in the war, with the hope to make it home to his loved one(s) commentt
Genre: Ballad
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Comments
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Beautiful and heartbreakingly written. I loved the feel of this piece, the chorus parts, really touching. I would love to hear this as a song. Great work and thank you for your entry
Best wishes!
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Good thought prevoking, emotional ballad. Nicely written and well thought out piece. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
Sandi -
Wow. I really liked this piece. I love how you have made it into a song,, and my favourite part was:
"Now I’m carried by my brothers, but I’ve gone to join the others,
From where I’ve gone, there’s no return"
It has a lot of emotion, and you must have worked really hard on this - it shows!
Thanks for the entry!
Good luck, Graciee
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This one is really good, too. I know a few veterans, and so I can loosely relate because of the stories they've told me in the past. You did a great job of showing emotion in this one. My favorite lines were "Because to leave before my time, would be to leave without goodbye" AND "every man was somebody." Really nice job.
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Really an amazing write. A lot of heart in it.
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EPIC.
Dude you have major talent.
This was amazing. =]
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This is really good! So sad but you really portrayed all the emotions and feelings well!
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I think you captured the essence of a solider's life, This was wonderful
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Great emotion. I love how you made the sond punch people in the face.
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awwww
this is so sad n touching..lovv it...awesome..
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speechless *tear*
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