I've searched for you, oh lady pure
In the solitude of night
Even in the golden daylight
Your path remains obscure
I've searched for you, oh root of all
By your power I was created
For speaking you I was hated
And in your name I will fall
Often I've come close to you
In the simplicity of youth
The mistakes that have since parted us, I can no longer undo
Often during harder times, you were there to sooth
Though recently I've come to feel, as if I'm rubber and you're glue
I've searched for you so very long, oh beautiful lady truth
Author notes
In this poem I've tried to reflect on how truth (whether absolute or relative) can seem so simple, yet becomes more complex and elusive the more you ponder on it, as shown in many philosophical works on epistemology.
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your personification of truth has made it more endearing, tempting us to search for it. i should say its impressive
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A 14 line poem
Civen the normal description of a sonnet, this is not one. The first three stanzas are roughly ballad form. The sestet also rather tends to conceal 8.6.8.6 meter.-
Next to last line rather baffling.
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very beautiful, and enjoyed ty for sharing and much luck in the contest xoxo
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This really was a beautiful work, although it did come off a bit... Christian rather than philisophical (I think the references to "harder times," and most of the second stanza may be the reason). The "rubber and glue" line also gives it a childish feel to it.
I would consider reworking those two lines, perhaps make one refer to a time of feeling the speaker lost truth, and the other refer to feeling as though it's found. That might lead well to the final line of searching.
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I am just learning sonnets, so I do not know about the form...the flow seemed a tad off to me in places, but the ryhme I enjoyed very much as well as the ideas. I think sooth should be soothe, maybe?? Good job.
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Searching for truth - a worthwhile adventure, indeed.
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