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Afterlife

Missing image

Such a commotion,
pandemonium,

distracted nerve endings,

tingled vibrations,jangle.

 

Sweeping gestures

illuminate an otherwise dull

exterior....

 

What the hell!

Lucifer walks this night,

in his bloodied boots,

and pinstriped tights.

 

Horned,

or should that  read honed,

to peoples plight,

in satirical might and frenzied flight...

on this hallowed night.

 

 

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  • Wickedruby1 gold member
    October 1

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    Very Good

    To walk the dark places on Halloween is not for me. I am a believer in the devils presence not only on Haloween but every day in our life.


  • Jonathan ROBIN
    October 1

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    Halloween

    honed to peoples plight might possibly benefit from an apostrophe without apostrophizing the author ... with perhaps irony with or without iron mail and/or male ... nevertheless one feels with respect that satirical might might be classed as a contradiction in terms prior to frenzied flight


  • oWl Quill
    October 1

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    Yay! Halloween!

    I don't know about you but I cannot wait for Halloween, this poem is a great exerpt of the Holiday.

    "what the hell!
    Lucifer walks this night,
    in his bloodied boots,
    and pinstriped tights."

    That is my favorite stanza. The first line made me laugh out loud, and the rest painted a great picture. Great job!


  • jessibabix33
    October 1
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    oooh

    eerie, but kept me wanting to read more. i liked it. good job =]

    reviewback xx

  • Dark...no hope
    October 1
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    FUCK YOU ALL!

    Your birth certificate is an apology from the condom factory.


  • Eve of Sophie
    October 1
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    Pretty cool...

    Very good dark poem. It's like reading easygoing darkness.


  • star girl
    October 1

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    Wow this is really perfect for halloween, should be made into some kind of song, to creep little kids out. lol. haahhaa. but this was a great write.I loved it.
    Thanks a humungo for sharing this piece of work. I can't wait to see more of your work. Good luck.


  • we are nowhere
    October 1

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    eerie, perfectly in time for the halloween season. I very much enjoyed this chilling read, thanks so much for sharing! can't wait to hear more!


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 26
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    Eeeeeeeeeek!!! *runs away howling in the deep, dark night*






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