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Last moment with you

I stand and I die
Crystallized tears I cry
Falling to the ground so fast
Burning are my memories of the past

I stand and I stumble
My solid world begins to crumble
Piece by piece it falls
You warming word beckons and calls

I stand and I leave
My dieing soul can no longer grieve
You turn to run
With your laughter and your gun

I stand no longer
This time you were stronger
Falling aside the stone
Berried in dirt, my home.

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  • Coloured Skies
    September 26

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    Very impressive piece! I did like this, there was allot of raw emotions portrayed in this poem and you got everything else out nicely. The rhyme was perfect and the ending just packed the whole poem together.