She plays the victim well, this wilful child,
Her lies accumulate like drifting snow,
And for a while her quarry is beguiled:
But behind his back, triumph she will crow.
Did I say child? her face belies her age;
Cruel venom smears each false and Judas kiss,
And so- called friends, with cunning she'll upstage,
To bask in limelight brings her so much bliss.
Did I conceive this viper in my womb?
To keep my love alive, I fight each day,
But aphids of her hate destroy the bloom;
Would I be wise, to simply walk away?
We do our best to raise our offspring well,
Do good intentions pave the road to hell?
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I was thinking of you just yesterday. Haven't seen you in a while. Nice to see you again and I'll be sure to look for your works.
This is a very well done poem. I envy poets who can write in this vein. I may try it just for the exercise but could never come up to the standards I've seen here.
Keep penning old friend.
Sharon (NurseyPoo)
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Interesting
A small piece of hell when a mother sees her daughter for what she really is instead of what she wanted her to be. I have walked in these shoes for two years
from personal experience I can tell you it is heart breaking.
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oh nice, congrats on the gold that you have won for this so far, the imagination in this was great I love how this make you think "Do good intentions pave the road to hell?" Amazing ending Thank you so much for entering my contest and Good luck
-♥Amy♥
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They do give heartbreak keep at i she worth it someday she'll thank you. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Did I conceive this viper in my womb?
It often amazes me how some mothers will excuse and tolerate any kind of physical and verbal abuse from their children whether sons or daughters.
the opening lines capture the reader and what follows keeps us reading
I must list you as a favourite and read more of your great poetry -
Oh a sonnet!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 You know how much I adore your sonnets!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How beautifully descriptive line 2 is! I love the gradual nature of the word "accumulate". Oh there are so many wonderful lines in this! I love the candor! I love the viper line! I love the line that begins "But aphids...."
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Wow. this one really made me think. Its sad how children can be these days, but this describes some of them very well. I love the questioning towards the end of the poem. Very good job.
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