Hey there Blue eyes,
I see you sitting there,
Staring into the obscurites of space,
Where nobody can see you.
Dazed and confused,
That's what you are,
Esapcing reality,
In deep contemplation of the world that spins around you,
Forgetting all that is real,
An seeing what is not there,
Consiousness has melted away.
You sit alone,
And wait,
For a familiar voice.
to wake you up.
But you are not quite ready,
To venture back,
Into the perils of reality.
A Crushing poem of love!
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Beautifully written.
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Daughter of Night
nice poem brother very nice i love how you worded this very good.
keep up teh good write -
Yello,
Very nice beginning. I like the imagery in Blue eyes...made me imagine a carefree sunny day under the sky..
It was unique how you envisaged someone staring into a space in which they themselves could not be seen. It is as if the reader becomes a cloud so that the world can spin around us. The line "Consciousness has melted away" gives us a sense of warmth almost like Icarus flying too near the sun
...and then...
We have to tumble back down to reality...
I really enjoyed the poem. The imagery was simple but well-refined. Also, the tone was in all ways uplifting, and it did actually provide escape.
Well done!
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Ah..the curious message behind the words can be noticed here and there..and that makes the poetry very effective as well..love this poetry ..well done..
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Awe darlung this is beautiful. and I love it great write
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Searra
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Wow, I am lost for words Daniel my twin. You written this so beautifully. Very lovely choice of words may I say. ^^ I like this.
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