Staring at the window pane
The cracks forming and falling like liquid ice
Everything falling away that was nice
Seemingly familiar things
All become a haunting of pain
As the last thing was said
It shattered the broken glass
The symphony was strung
The destruction was brung
As we all fall down
The ashes of our lives burning down
The broken glass shattering around
Falling down
Falling down
Loving the sound
As we fall the tears streaming forth
Where did we go wrong
Someonce once told me
Love will not save us
But how can that be
Look what love gave us
A world full of killing and blood spilling
The screams ringing
Shattering the crimson air
The broken glass spilling like a tide of blood
More shattering is coming
The broken glass will be broken further until none is left
The cold feeling as you fall down
The broken glass shattering
As we all fall down
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Comments
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Very nice write. I absolutely love the way you've set this poem out and how it enforces the "down" feeling in "falling down". Also, I like the way you've used minimal rhyme, it definitely works well with this piece and it flows nicely. Keep up the good work.
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Daughter of night
nice poem mommy very good adn sad. makes me think about things. well great write and keep witing awsome poems
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Liquid ice. I LOVE the concept, I just want to box it up and take it home! Hah, This is awesome. I love the dark gory feel, very nice work!
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Wow I like gory! =) And I see you used some nickel back lyrics in there. Nice it goes well with the poem hehe. Very deep.
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