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To the Exacerbated

 

 


We firmly grasp

long forgotten truths,

lost understandably due to volitale natures

of both the percieved

and the percievers.

 

The believers of such practices,

those are the ones understandably

ripping scalp from brain to let loose

long forgotten truths,

now realized.

And that realization

rips firmly grasped dreams

away from our flesh

to replace it with the cool glass

of nothingness.

 

And we try to reason with it.

(ah the folly of man...)

 

It's easier to forget, but, I fear, we're

lost, understandably due to volatile natures.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

a little scattered, yes.
I'm a little scattered right now.

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 7

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    I like the cyclical movement of this poem, the center being the nut of truth, and then, back to the repetition. I also found the "p...p...p..." repetition of sound interesting..a sputtering at almost getting the truth and then doing so, but almost woefully hopelessly.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 2
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    "The cool glass of nothingness" is a great line, Poet. Very vivid, visual, visceral. Good luck in Carol's contest.