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On My Way Down

Risk taking
Passion
Shortened
Gasp
of

Breath

I am shaking as I
completely surrender

No lies, no games
No feints and jabs
Hidden attacks
Stalking prey

Close your eyes and jump
The fall will most certainly kill you
Isn't the view worth it

On your way down?

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  • AlexandraHamilton
    September 25
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    An interesting thought, those last four lines. Well done.