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Metal Pipe Am I




I awoke today aware

I'm a leaking pipe.

You all keep flowing through me,
in then out of my life,
and I'll stay clean for you
so no rust runs in your blood,

but my mind soaks in all sorts of corrosive things.


What's funny about metal
is it absorbs heat
until one day
it scalds those
that take it for granted.

What's funny about pipes
is that they smash faces.

Funny huh funny so funny
now laugh

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

I'm not actually gonna hurt someone, I don't exactly feel like hurting someone, but I'm tired of getting hurt because I'm a nice guy.

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  • MotherMachineGunn
    September 25

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    Refreshing...

    I love the metaphor...When I read the title, I could not have imagined it would have held this content. I love the sarcasm of the ending, smashed faces and all. Surprisingly image provoking. Job well done, I will read this one again in the future.

    Good Luck in the contest
    ~MotherMachineGunn


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 25

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    Ouch. Haven't read anything from you in a while. This seems sad and angry. I hope everything is okay. It was a stunning write, though. Amazing.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~