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I want to be the Star in your Night;
I want to be your Flame burning Bright;
I want to be your Sun,
pulling Darkness into the Light.


or



I wish,
to warm your World, Be the Light;
to be the Fire burning Bright;
to be the Stars in the Night;
to bring Darkness into Light.




i like both versions, can't decide which to get rid of... any comments would be welcome.

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Just something i thought of before bed. i have two versions of it, both sound good to me, i kinda like the second half better. any suggestions?

it needs something...but what?

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  • HystericalHeart
    September 25
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    Simple. Short. Gentle ryhming.. I enjoyed it. Some ideas come at random moments. ^^