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Like maple leaves in autumn

I can hear what time has done to you
From your knees, as you creaked into
The living room with tea;
You put the pot down
Like a two-hundred pound dumbbell,
And relieved of the burden collapsed on the couch

This from the woman who bore me around
On her hip, lifted mountains of laundry,

Pulled me through the parts of life
I couldn't face alone,
Here you are brought low
By a teapot and the thought of dishes

You're worried, and you wear it
Just behind your smile so only I,
Your over-attentive son can see it
But I am not,
I can see the beauty in you still

 

You are exactly as you should be;

Worn yes,

But also softened by the storms you've weathered,
And falling apart slowly and with much grace
Like the maple leaves in autumn

Author notes

I think my mother would hate this poem if she read it. She'd probably think I was calling her old. Really though, I write this with honest love.

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    September 28

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    This is an awesome poem. I loved the metaphors and the imagery in this piece. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • tara wilson gold member
    September 25

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    i think you chose a perfect simile here and i love how the length of the poem sets that up - really beautiful poetry Glen, that any mother would be honored to have inspired.


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 25

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    The love shines through in this poem, and i'm sure that is what she'll read and hold dear to her heart. Who would not want to be compared to leaves falling and the colourful beauty and grace of autumn?

    The softness of this piece speaks volumes. beautiful.

    ~ Nicolette


  • katelynmcdougall
    September 24
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    good ending.

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