her tears began
to mix in
with her spit
as I pulled her only toy
right from her hands,
while she watched
me in distress.
drip drip
It fell from her
parted lips
forming
a little puddle
on the bottom
of her over sized
shirt.
her eyes
revealing pain
and agony
-
I wanted
to warn her
in so many ways,
that life
wasn't going
to be easy.
-
smiling,
I decided
maybe it was time
to give her back her raddle.
Author notes
漂亮- beautiful [ in Chinese ]
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie # 35 of 37! Prewrites but follow rules or will be removed. by Beautiful-N-Broken.
480 points, ended November 24, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honest thoughts. thank you
Comments
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Aww... that's too cute. I really enjoyed reading this write. You did a wonderful job on it. Thanks so much for the entry and good luck in the contest and in all you do.
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I love it - from title to end. The twist is stellar and not predictable. You have a smooth way of words and they flow intensely.
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A little mean, but really a nice piece.
Precise imagery.
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