i.
I sat there and waited on the stone bench cold, hard, stiff and un-alive. It was more than a comfort to sit there and pretend it was a throne. I sat on my hands leaning forward wondering if I should risk leaning farther and landing my feet, whether I should risk standing up and walking away from the metal pole obstructing the view of the perfect sunset. I felt the wind touch me just slightly and decided maybe today wasn’t the day to hope that I would fall in love with you
ii.
I watched quietly the lives of everyone around me the people walked passed but only a few waved. There was a new stone bench, a little higher than the last and a little more out of the way. It was harder to smile from so far a distance. I played with the patterns the leaves made there on the ground right under me. There was a house and a heart and here a person. I stepped down and crushed him, and under my delicate step he became just a plain leaf. Today was not the day to try and understand you.
iii.
I felt the warmth in my hand. Cold, long, fingers but a palm that held a bright future that wasn’t ever mine to see. The lines etched into my hand ended much too quickly and started too slowly. My feet were weighted with stone as I was dragged like a doll up and down the parade. My smile carved into my face and my ever growing wrinkles widened like the bags under my eyes. Today was not the day to admit that I would never love you.
iiii.
Here I am in his arms that will never be quite as strong as yours. His temper doesn’t ever rise and I never see him bite his lip. Nor his knuckles turn white as his hands form into fists. I hear him say “I love you” with meaning and faithfulness and all I could think was today is not the day to realize I don’t love him but I always did really love you.
Author notes
ummmmmmmmmmmmmmm
i know this sucks im still working on it
but idk if i will ever finish
i feel like crap.
AND BTW WAY I WANT IT TO BE iIii NOT iv
DONT ASK
astroturf?
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Today was not the day to try and understand you.
what day is
hope ur ok
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"today wasn’t the day to hope that I would fall in love with you "
"There was a house and a heart and here a person. I stepped down and crushed him, and under my delicate step he became just a plain leaf. Today was not the day to try and understand you."
"Today was not the day to admit that I would never love you. "
basically, i loved how you ended each paragraph, this was gorgeous. reminds me of how i used to feel, how i used to write. i miss writing like this, but i don't think that i miss the feeling.
you are lovely.
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ohmyyyy.
I don't think I've ever read anything this prosey by you before.
juana, this is heartwrenching. I love it.
there were a few spelling things
but w/e that doesn't take off from your wonderfulness.
I like the endings of each paragraph.. they were repetitive but not.. I dunno how to explain.
the imagery in it all is so lovely, it makes me think of autumn a lot. and iiii. is beautiful. it's my favourite part and a powerful ending.
♥
if you add on tell me
I'd love to read it again
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it was incredible like always
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this was amazing! beautiful flow and your use of words was perfect in the way you described your love in this piece. I loved it! I think you did a great job and it is the far opposite of sucking.
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this is really interesting. i like the way you expressed your experiences and your troubles with love.
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this is actually...very beautiful & your words flowed so nicely =]
"It was more than a comfort to sit there and pretend it was a throne."
i love this.
the ending of each stanza, held me captivated. god, i wish i wrote this!
i can relate.
loveee youuu<3
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"I stepped down and crushed him, and under my delicate step he became just a plain leaf. Today was not the day to try and understand you."
What a pack of a punch the last line has. Makes me think of me actually now -_-
I love that line(s) that I quoted up there too. My favourite out of the piece. If you do change it, let me know, but I think this is fine as it is :]
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wow. this is amazing sweetie. honestly. I do not have the words.
I think I will have to add it to my list of favorite poems.
thanks so much for asking me to read it!
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this is written really well!! D=
ur so original
and acid trip
im jealous!!!!!! ;D!!
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