the more you think you know
well, you probably know less
you can't control it this time
you unforgettable mess
you are the sun that turned black
when the world needed the day
but don't even try again
you'll never find your way
oh i won't look for the monsters in my closet
the door stays open tonight- yeah I won't close it
so don't sit there and judge me just by what you see
there's a whole lot more - there's a whole lot of me
I don't know why you missed it
or why I even cared
but you closed the door and shut me out
it's almost like you're scared
So now I think I've waited here
for way far too long
I just give up, this time I quit
I never did belong
oh i won't look for the monsters in my closet
the door stays open tonight- yeah I won't close it
so don't sit there and judge me just by what you see
there's a whole lot more - there's a whole lot of me
A contest entry
- Anything and everything by Fallen-Thumper.
700 points, ended September 29, 2009, 50 entries
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Humm..it seems that every thing around is beyond to the contol ..and this way the sentiments and the words of the souls are just crying one by one..indeed a touching work again..
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thank you for entering
this piece says a lot and i really liked it.
thanks for entering and good luck.
i liked the repeating of the coupled lines.
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not bad ...you should colab it .. this is something i could get into... specialy in the pissed off mood im in now... damn bartenders... whos got a knife?
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well you can definitely add more too it or take away, whatever you want. I'm definitely open to collabing with it
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There's a lot said in this, and some I wish didn't have to be said of course. But, you've put it right out there and said it pretty clearly for sure. Should be a good song too so waiting to hear the music. And, I think you're right, "there's a whole lot more - there's a whole lot of me." That's very much true, as I'm finding out. Just keep it going. And, you have a knack for saying it well in things like this. Good job as usual.
Hugs
GP Paul
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