whirling, swirling
into space
further down
thoughts erase
blackness invades,
your soul
incased
thumping, jumping
deaths embrace
A contest entry
- Prompt: ... a dream on our way to death by Manda Kathryn.
400 points, ended September 26, 2009, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Humm..once again..I can see that how the load of the circustances which are not happy in situations are forcing the words to cry through and throug...a strong delievery of the soul.....thanks for sharing it...
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nice rhyming
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love this poem short but much impact!!
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
the dark green font makes this a little difficult to read against the black
I love how much impact this holds in it's few lines and words; it read to me like someone was gasping the words out in frustration - excellent
best of luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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