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Love Me This Moment

Love me only,
inhale my flaws
within your soul,
discarding them

forever...

Teach me
to love myself,
and in return

you...

Love me tomorrow,
believe in who I am.
Come within me,
complete my form.

Love me now,
share your ecstasy
with me;
entirely.

Love me gently,
caress my pain
with your breath,
allow me
a degree of warmth.

Love me forever
and perhaps longer,
yet for now

love me this moment...


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Phrase prompt..You are the words to my hearts music..

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  • Brokenwinges
    November 23
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    This has to be the most touching and heartfelt words ever..So refeshing..The rhyme and simplicity reaches out and touches the reader! Beautiful!


  • Nature Song silver member
    November 8

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    To find true love such as this, she must be simply amazing! We search our whole lives for someone real and tangible...a love of never ending! Beautiful penning once again.

    ~Sie


  • fallendust
    October 29

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    This poem is surely beautiful. I enjoyed reading this one especially today since I am dealing with some love complications as we speak. Beautifully done!!!
    Sincerely,
    Sarah


  • Tania M Camargo
    October 16
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    a beautiful moment of rhythmic poetry
    as a love song.
    Congratulations!

  • luv2dream gold member
    October 15
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    i love the simplicity of the poem... i think it is full of beauty!


  • Clearing The Mist
    October 14

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    This is good.
    hey...read this for me and please give me the honest truth about it: In my nice little dream..

  • Synchronicity gold member
    October 12

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    Genuine

    A sincere and refreshingly honest request. In its simplicity, it shines. Nothing grandiose here, just a moment in real time, and a genuine wish. "Inhale my flaws
    within your soul, discarding them forever" is a rare thought, and an amazing one. Congratulations on the trophy.


    • John BoSox
      October 14

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      Thank you very much for reading my work..I appreciate it

      John

  • abu nuwas
    October 8

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    Sorry....

    I am so stiff upper-lippy and reserved that even though I can see it is written with a fine lightness, I somehow cannot get into it. In the same way, although I don't understand the rules, glad for you about the progress of the Redsox


  • sinfull
    October 8

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    These words wash over the reader like a gentle tide, flow around as soft music. Very lovely in both presentation and message. The prompt suits this so well because this poem reads like music. well done, poet


  • Goddess of illusion
    October 8

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    You worded this perfectly... The dreamy flow to this write is beautiful,a perfect description of how it should be, but is not always. Your first 2 stanza blew me away, up to the very last word...

    I applaud you...

    It is beautiful dear poet...


  • Tqop
    October 6
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    I love what you did with this prompt. Great job.


  • smitaanand
    October 5

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    Thanks for sharing this was refreshingly beautiful and sparked my imagination.It also brought back memories.This was really special,take care


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    October 5

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    to drink in the flavior Divine and cross the sails with wine to dream of life to come and the message so did rhyme.. with the meaning of life and the one you love... beautiful dear one hugs always Angel♥


  • Stirrer of Stardust
    October 5

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    Every where I turn.... * SIGH *

    I feel like I'm going through the blazing fire of changes - with little true knowledge of what that means, but think I figured out the gist of it.

    I am in awe of the beauty and knowledge all woven together into that fine tapestry of poetry at it's best.

    So very, very far beyond well done.

    Love & Blessings,

    ~ ~ Janet ~ ~


  • awannabepoet
    October 4

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    Very nice use of words here John, this is perfect just the simple and delicate framework of a sweet little song.

    Keep up the good work.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 1

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    The simplest words often say so much and this is one of them poems that does so, thank you for your lovely entry and good luck in my contest, Josie


  • poetryality silver member
    September 26

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    This is not a work of pleading but a tender song that requests a solitary emotion, the give and take of it. Yes, this is quite lyrical. I hear a flute, and a chello, even a folk guitar... Yes indeed, very nice, soothing, and melodic. I wish you well in the challenge.


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


    • John BoSox
      September 26
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      Thank you kindly..I appreciate your warm words

      John


      • individuality gold member
        September 27
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        if you go to war with me you will lose.

      • individuality gold member
        September 27
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        why do you insist on speaking to me when i have asked you politely and madly to stop speaking to me? pay me some respect at least and ignore me. you know where the button is. do not try and wind me up. now i will say again, please do not ever speak to me again. i don't want crap im's off you saying i am a sweetie etc.


  • StarEyes
    September 25

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    My Dear Brother,

    This is just simply amazing!!! What a wonderful read this one is!!!

    YAY!!! You entered a contest!! This is very deserving of a trophey or two! You are getting better and better with each piece that you post! Great job!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    September 25

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    This has such a universal feel of knowledge and truth to it. I think that all who read it will be able to relate to it's central message of love and acceptance. Thanks for sharing your gift.
    Kendal


  • An Old Codger gold member
    September 24

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    This reads like a song from the heart that all who truly love should sing and hear echoed back to them.

    Bravo my friend.

  • Bob Fox
    September 24

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    Poet

    Like a sweet love song I hear the music of your words. And yes the wonders of a true love. May it be so.


  • Gothikitten13
    September 24
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    very wonderful i lik dz piece.


  • whitecoffee
    September 24
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    wonderfully clear and deep...again. I like the contradictions and the last lines...Very nice job on this, thanks for sharing it


  • evershine-90
    September 24

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    This is beautiful! Love the depth penned in this piece. The emotions one feels while reading this is just amazing!! Beautiful love *sigh* Great work!!

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