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My Becoming (HM)


Something
    crawls this grey mortality –

teething on the
foundations
of my prolonged
bitter convictions

healing faults
etched in the core
of my
misled hollow visions

sinking in the
depths of my
undefined fragmented
essence

and

rising above
the limits of my
existence-stained
weary resistance


Something
      holds my imperfections down –

feeding my
spirit a burst
of immense
possibilities

unearthing
the presence
of an awakened
divinity


Author notes

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Prompt Pic: http://www.smashingapps.com/wp-content/uploads/2009/01/23-very-conceptual-and-terrific-dark-art-photos.jpg

This photo reminds me of two things:
1. Tool's Laterlus record.
2. It's hard to stay mad, when there's so much beauty in the world. Sometimes I feel like I'm seeing it all at once, and it's too much, my heart fills up like a balloon that's about to burst. – Lester Burnham

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  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 21

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    Explosive---the emotions that build
    as the words cascade downward---
    almost causing one to want to read upwards,
    to experience the "unearthing"--revealing the
    "awakened divinity!"

    This idea may have been implanted in my brain
    from your piece where the last lines came first!!

    An extraordinary piece!

    M-C


    • PorcelainHope
      October 21
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      Thanks for the comment!

      Now that's gonna get stuck in you brain for a while. I'll probably try writing a piece that can be read both ways. LOL.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 19

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    unearthing
    the presence
    of an awakened

    I love those lines. Your vocabulary and thought presentation throughout this piece is remarkable. I really enjoyed this piece immensely! Thanks for entering my gazillion prompt contest. It’s an honor to read your work!


  • sense surreal gold member
    September 27

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    existence-stained
    weary resistance

    you own this defiition
    love that!

    this is deep and is writte excellently
    you construct your thoughts amazingly
    with the way you choose your words

    musta po

    Anna Lee


    • PorcelainHope
      September 27
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      Salamat sa comment Anna. Well, ok lang, I'm trying to write as much as I can - in between my super busy schedule. hehe.
      Ikaw, kamusta? If I'm not mistaken you haven't written anything in a while. I also noticed that this is a different account, what's with the change?
      So I'm checking your poems in this account.


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    September 25

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    life bursting from the scenes
    basked an unearthly immigration of self worth
    love the messages penned so well Hugs Angel♥

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