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Memories

i am gonna be sad without you
because my life was all about you
but the ocean stoled you

from me in its waves

 

gonna move on to live on 

forget about you somehow 

because everything i've hoped for

has gone to waste

the sun is setting out on the horizon

over it i try paint your face

but my eyes are are cloudy

all i know is how i long for you 

but i can't have your embrace 

i long for you

but i just cant find your face

 

its gonna be a long long night to get through 

a long long time to find you 

a long long list of memories 

i wrote to forget these

times ive been mistaken 

cause you only left my heart achin 

 

look how wrong that was 

i gave you all my trust

now there's no more us 

I'm leavin when i find my feet again 

 

today i went to where you used to get me 

i'd love if you just let me 

i'd swim inside that ocean to you back 

cause I'm tired of waitin 

and if it comes to nothin 

its pointless stayin here I'm going back

because i fall for so long 

and me you turned your back on 

i fought for a chance to stay in your embrace 

but seems like its worth none 

something i don't wanna have to think on

so over it it i try and erase your face 

i said over it i try and erase your face 

 

a long long night to get through

along long time to find you 

a long long list of memories 

i write down to forget these 

times i've been mistaken 

you only left me heart achin 

look how wrong that was 

i gave all my trust 

now there's no more us 

so I'm leaving when  i find  my feet again 

I'm leavin when i find my feet again

 

its gonna be a long long night to get through 

a long long time to find you 

a long long list of memories i write to forget these 

 times i've been mistakin 

i thought you'd never leave my heart achin 

and look how wrong i was 

i gave you all my trust 

and now theres no more us 

 

iam leaving when i find my feet again 

and leavin when i find my feet again 

yes i am leavin when i find my feet again 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • davidwright silver member
    September 28

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    It's a bit lengthy for a song and needs at least a three line chorus between every other verse. Thanks for your entry and happy trails.


  • AsIThink gold member
    September 25

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    This was well-and done as a song. I read it through and thought that I missed something (due to the repetition)...daaaah (hahaha). Saw your ANs and realized it's a song for a contest...bravo. Nice job on this.

    AsIThink...


  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 24

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    Lyrics and words speak of a lost love..relied upon but no longer there. The repeat lines as the poem stanzas near fade off in the distance....I wish you well in the contest!


  • serenity silvermoon
    September 24

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    i was reading this and it sounded like a song i was right this is wonderful and sad good luck in the contest keep up the great work