Going through the backwoods home
I am still trying to understand how I got where I am
How did things go so wrong
Why am I now traveling alone
I remember our days of happiness
Picnics by the lake
Walking hand in hand
Down the path that lead us home
Then another caught your eye
Made you feel a spark
That you say had been lost for years
How did it die without me knowing
So now I walk down this path
That is leading me to my new home
A home without you
That I will get used to
Author notes
Gold trophy from sweetgurl's contest allpoetry.com/Contest/566177
Written April 6th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- This is my 3rd contest...I would like for you by sweetgurl.
325 points, ended April 7, 2004, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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You do sad poems well, another great write and the picture fits the poem nicely. Imagery is well portrayed and once again, another worthy winner of gold.
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This is very sad...but it does happen...painful...I know...great work, thanks for sharing
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okay
nice job.I won't lie it's not one of my favorites, but still an awesome poem and it's powerful too,i have trouble in that area -
yep
yeah yeah yeah i know it took me long enough to read the poem and comment but oh well at least i did. i like this poem i remember seeing this picture that you have on it to and i thought about writing something to go along with it but yeah i dont know i guess that just didnt feel like it oh well. good write. -
Awwwww no...you still would have won and you're welcome!
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Oh my gosh, if you would have entered I wouldn't have gotten it. Thank you so much for your sweet comment
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This is very beautiful - I can see why you won gold...your words are so descriptive, I'm glad I didn't enter - there's no way I could compete with this - congrats!!!
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i like this...very creative...i like your imagination
this isn't stupid, since you told me it was...it really is good...well anyway great job and thanks for sharing...
take care
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awww...that's so sad. wonderfully penned. God Bless you and thanks for entering.
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ah but the strangest thing could happen you know? You never know who is standing further down the path ready to walk the rest of the way with you
Beautifully sad write, with very good imagery.
Natalia
Edited on Apr 07, 2:37 because 'I don't know me own bloody language'. -
Sad
Hi Whisper:
A truly sad write. It makes my heart sad to hear of these kind of things happening to good people. I am not sure if this is your story, but the story you penned is one that is too often told with different tales and different happenings, yet the same ending. Thanks for sharing this sad but beautiful write. Bill -
awesome write! it goes well with the pic....though I guess that is what its supposed to do
Anyway...good luck!
Peace and love
Susan
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This is such a sad poem ! but its very very beautiful...you have a flair for decribing scene and emotions and it matches the picture so well. I think everyone has felt this emtion in some stae of their life ...great poem! -
A beautiful poem. Fits well with the picture - a road to walk down for quiet, secluded picnics, a solitary place. Good job.
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Aww, this is so sad, and unfortunately, at least in my experience, so true. Lost love is a horrible thing, yes, you have the memories of the good times, but that makes it worse as well, because you'll always miss what you had. This piece really expresses that feeling, of losing something special, and not knowing where you went wrong. I hope that you'll continue to write under happier circumstances. Muchas amor, Mandy
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This was good. Kind of made me think about rising above this guy leaving you...which you can and will. All I say is dont give up,youll get through it and find someone to love you and ONLY you. Good Job.
-J.
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful comment
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nice
oooooooooooooooo.... How sad. poor person (in the poem). Like how s/he decides to move on in the end of it -
Moving and touching words.
I was truly moved by your words, though inspired by the picture they are so related to life and as it has touched some people. A moving read and one I felt deeply as I read. Bless you, sharon
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