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Like Dry Ice





I stared into nothingness today.


He's been there for quite sometime now.
Only time mattered when I'd oblige
his nasty presence.

I looked into his strangely warm eyes,
and realized,
I looked out from them.
I was nothingness
and it numbs a person's whole
like dry ice:
You'd think the cold hits hardest,
but no, its the slow burn bringing
the deepest pain.

to run away...
where do you go to hide from yourself?



 











 

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yeah, I'm not doing so well. I'm getting help, don't worry for me.

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 24
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    I know this feeling well... to want to run from yourself. An impossible task indeed. Powerful poem!


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 24

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    oh wow. you have done a stunning job on this. i could feel the emotion bleeding out into the words. brilliant. best of luck in the contest.
    write on.
    ~*~SP~*~