I'm starin' at the world through my one way mirror
Observing different people tryin' to be the same
The thought of not conforming must bring them terror
But I just watch from my world and hang my head in shame
I'm ashamed ... what a shame...
They glance into the glass, but can't see me
I'm in another dimension all on my own
If they gave me a chance, then they might see
It's easier to be yourself, then to be a clone
A clone ... they're all clones...
Robots with no passions or real emotions
Copy what they see just like they were programmed
No real concerns, just going through the motions
But computers are prone to viruses, therefore they are damned!
Damn ... they're damned...
So I stay invisible behind their reflection
Cautious to remain myself and avoid detection
I must avoid detection...
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Just a little something to break out of my hiatus
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humz.. don't know where you were going.. but actually the idea was special.. you were going in a very different way
I liked it :
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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I absolutely love this, this is so awesome and describes how I feel in this world completly, I am so happy i read this, but also depressed that it is so true lol.
'I'm ashamed ... what a shame...
They glance into the glass, but can't see me
I'm in another dimension all on my own
If they gave me a chance, then they might see
It's easier to be yourself, then to be a clone '
This is the part i can relate to most. Sometimes it feels like you are just watching the world, and everyone else in it except you is the same, and that they could never understand you, even if they tried.
Well written, well constructed, I abolutely love it.
Totally Bookmarked !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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wow I am surprised at how much I like this; I am not usually a fan of rhyme but the message here was strong and I defintiely felt like I could relate.
"I'm in another dimension all on my own
If they gave me a chance, then they might see
It's easier to be yourself, then to be a clone "
---love this.
lately i have beenfeeling like i am going through the motions and i cant stand it; i watch other people conform to do what they are expected and it kills me; i always promise myself i wont be like them but lately I haven't been so sure if I am one of those people, too.
thank you for sharing this thought provoking read : )
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Hehehe! I loved this! My fav. bit was the "viruses" bit...it had me chuckling!
The form and style kept me interested, and I found the whole concept to be very enlightening - the words are so true!
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wow!!
i love it!! if you already haven't...please please please please please post it on the group site!!! please please please!! i love how you write...
Robots with no passions or real emotions
Copy what they see just like they were programmed
No real concerns, just going through the motions
But computers are prone to viruses, therefore they are damned!
is just an awesome stanza!! and it's so true!! damnation to the conformists!!! lol!! i LOVE it!!!
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so very amazing
i love how you refer to them as clones and robots.. because that is exactly what most people have become.. so afraid of rejection that they change themselves so they "fit in"
i dont see why people strive to be perfect when everyone know there is no such thing as perfection..
it is nothing more than someone trying to tell you what to be..
which is idiotic..
you're poems still amaze me and it amazes me even more of much alike our thoughts and views are on this world and the people in it..
keep it up! >_<
<3<3<3
SkitzoSkittllez
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such a good poem, truly one of the best ive read since i have been here,which isnt to long but still, beautiful write, i related to it a lot,everyone is caring about who and what is cool,
and trying their hardest to be like them,good job here
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What a great thought
Such great thought put into this piece. And such a reality too. The way I see it, soon everyone is going to look exactly the same just like clones, as you put it here. I really like the idea that your hiding in order to avoid being like everyone else, and you are so unique in every way or so I have seen. I don't think you have to worry about conforming lol. Your writing is the most unique I have ever read. It's like a breath of fresh air so-to-speak. Keep writing and thanks for sharing this one. You should do me a favour and read my most recent one "Mind Demon" I would love your input
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mmhmm speaks to me of individualism and being yourself. Nice write. Had me laughing a few times, you always seem to have a little sarcastic haha but in a good way, a so what approach, in your writes which I find refreshing and shows your individualism . Favorite line: "Robots with no passions or real emotions", as this seems the way alot of people in my life are at the moment, only seeking what "they" desire, using each other for "their" purpose, not caring about each other in the true sense of "caring". Keep up the good work. Thanks for the heads up on this write.
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the writing is great ..... a very intense and thought provoking piece .... It seems so true.... we indeed have become such robotic idols....who don't even have the time to smile at least once a day....its so sad!!
Id' like to know, however, from whose point of view are you writing this one? please reply
a very good write
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