and yet ill keep loving
I am locked within a little box
The key hole crowed with spider webs
No longer even letting my ragged breathe through the holes
Yet the smile on your lips still holds
Did i hold anywhere in your heart at all?
Or was i just a single fantasy
That once you achieved
You caste off forever
And as i slowly die
You whisper you always loved me
But that was not enough in the end
Demise overshadows the light
As i little by little slip away
Maybe i never depraved to love
The scars i was given where deserved in some way
And yet what did i do...
One thing all always know
Through my twisted and suffering death
Ill always love you
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This poem is really good, I love the imagery that you manage to create, digging deep into my imagination.
I am locked within a little box
The key hole crowed with spider webs
No longer even letting my ragged breathe through the holes
This section is definatley my favourite, and you do a good job os setting the mood for the whole poem. I also like the line:
You caste off forever
Those four words, for some reason, I find really intense.
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Loved It<3
you are really awesome.. this poem was really amazing there are way too many words for me to make it out the way i want it to be so all im going to say is keep writing these Poems.. Because you are totally awesome! : ) -
I think it holds such truth. there is always a small part of me that will love him even though he has hurt me too much for me to care about or even consider about getting back with him. the feelings in this poem display so much that i think others will connect to
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Aww.. yes, such a broken hearted write.. yet holding a subtle strength and the enduring power of love. Wonderful write here sweetheart!
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