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Where We Fell In Love

I tread alone along this road,
The track we used to share,
Tasting bittersweet memories
amongst the foliage there

The landscape has not changed,
Morning glory just begins to bloom,
Each step seems harder, heavier
and lonely without you

The thorns dig in through my jeans
as I stumble down the path,
A marriage made in hell,
Behold the aftermath

The birds still sing in wonder
at the beauty of this place
and yet I can feel nothing,
Without you it's 'just a place'

Why else did I come here
but to sit alone and cry?
When in the earth all I can see
are the deepest brown of eyes

I stumble on the jagged rocks
of this path we used to share,
Remember nights of campfires
that we used to have here?

So many people trying to help,
Without you I am lost,
My tears are frozen shards of ice,
My skin crawls with the frost

I cannot help the bitter thoughts,
Yet you have no idea,
Until these thoughts become nothing
I'll find my solace here

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  • csmmoms2
    September 23

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    Here's a song by Joshua Radin
    If you can listen to it...well worth it.

    What If You

    What if you could wish me away
    What if you spoke, those words today
    i wonder if you'd miss me, when i'm gone
    Its come to this, release me
    i'll leave before the dawn
    but for tonight, i'll stay here with you
    yes, for tonight, i'll lay here with you
    but when the sun hits your eyes through your window
    there'll be nothing you can do

    what if you could hear this song
    what if i felt like i belong
    i might not be leaving (oh) so soon
    began the night believing
    i loved you in the moonlight
    so for tonight, i'll stay here with you
    yes for tonight, i'll lay here with you
    but when the sun hits your eyes
    through your window
    there'll be nothing you can do

    i could have treated you better, better than this
    well i'm gone, this song's your letter:
    i can't stay in one place
    so for tonight, i'll stay here with you
    yes, for tonight, i'll lay here with you
    but when the sun hits your eyes through your window
    there'll be nothing you can do.


  • Antipodi
    September 23

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    wow you have truly captured the emotions of a lost one sadly it is becoming more common every day an excellent write dear poet