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Veritas.

Oh, what beautiful horns bleed from broken halos.

I once saw  you in such a light so bright
I became so blind...
I held you so high..
I could not see in front of me..

Then one day your great wings gave out..
and you fell further than the floor
but i could not hear nor care for the deafening screams and shouts...

you are my beautiful broken hero no more...

Author notes

i was listening to the spill canvas. and the rhythm and lyrics brought this to mind..
it was the first i wrote in under 10 minutes..

tell me how this made you feel

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  • Silences Voice
    October 10

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    Very nice

    For being such a short time it took you to write this and me knowing how you are, its very good. I like it a lot, you should definitely add on to it in the future. Its a wonderful start to an amazing piece of literature. Loved it.

    ---Cookie---


  • VidaBella17
    September 28
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    woah.

    Epic.
    Very nice rythem in here too.
    Music is such a good catalist.
    Great write!

  • RainbowXButterflies
    September 24
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    I honestly dont know what to say

  • RainbowXButterflies
    September 23
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    :}


    • PuRfekly-Phlaw3d
      September 23

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      a weird smiley thing doesnt tell me anything... wudya think?

      • RainbowXButterflies
        September 23
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        I honestly think, the first line shall haunt my inner inspiration.
        And then BLAHM It'll pop into my head and i shall spew poetic nonsense for days


        This is sad..to meh. (though i can't interpret past the oooh pretty colors. So i never really see the actual picture buttt...)
        you usually write an undercurrent of sad or, past nostalgia

        something conflicted

        And damnit. Why doesn't anyone write names.

        You, like one other person infuriate me to death because you always seem to write about someone and then my head exsplodes AND BLAWHHOSAhsDJKASFL UWEHDFWIEULHFDJASKDBFHC I cant figure it out and i stay insane for exactly 66 minutes 66 seconds 66 millaseconds and I STILL stay within one hour time frame

        I LOVE THIS DAMNITZ>

        "You were my beautiful broken hero no more."

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