There is no B*L*A*C*K
There is no w~h~i~t~e
Only Gr@y in my world
Everything is thrown
for a L
o
o
p..................
and plummets to the ground
c/r/a/s/h/i/n/g at the
s..p..e..e..d of my heart
breaking at the thought
of being ((ALONE))
D/a/y/b/r/e/a/k comes
and everyone is o^f^f
to work.................
but as for me, I @m
home a:l*o*:n:e 1nce more
Will it ever [end] ???
prob@bly (not) ...
I am a/l/w/a/y/s a
l
o
n
e
In my (((world))) of s*i*c*k*n*e*s*s
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A contest entry
- k .:.*. Dirty Pretty Poems k .*.:.k by fairy princess k.
439 points, ended September 28, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow......this is a very deep poem with a lot of emotion. I understand the pain as well. I have a father who is still alive, not by his choice, and suffers the sickness of cancer and BPD. Everyday is a struggle..But he won't take his meds, instead he self medicates. I can't seem to help him too much...but I do try.
Thank you for sharing......
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Beautiful Poem
I am a fan of your poetry, great thoughts. It's just like I feel all alone, dark, and wierd, I can really relate to this. Beautiful Poem!
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Good Job
I Really Liked this one as well. I feel that way sometimes. So I can identify with emotions that can be attached to the words of this one. Thank You Again
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A great write. I'm generally don't read dirty pretty but I very much enjoyed this poem
The images you've portrayed to the reader of the world being grey allow us to continue and paint the rest of the poem in a beautiful grey shade. The repetition and expansion of the world alone was affective and really caused the reader to address it. A very enjoyable read, even for someone who doesn't usually read dirty pretty =D
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Yeah the rat race monotony sucks...
but as they say "idle hands are the devil's tools". I know that I'm my own worst enemy when it comes to boredom. I find a way to totally submerge myself in soon to follow regretful loathing and vice and that's no bueno. Anywho I'm diggin the write; it states what I feel many a thinkers' dilemma befalls.
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already commented, just stopping by for the group reading list
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i can understand you revceived a Trophy,
beautufuly sad penning Jeremy
with love and blessings
Rend
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I 'suffer' from borderline personality disorder and this poem explains exactly how i feel most days. Absolutely brilliant!!
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wow,amazing poem,were all a little sick,lol,best of luck in the contest,looking forward to more
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Oh wow, Jeremy. That was incredibly powerful, and heartwrenching. The DP was sweet, too.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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I really liked the structure of your poem, the visual effect is inspiring.
Hmmm~ I see we have different definitions of gray and alonenessness...what came through clearly was the sense of separation from others, of meaninglessness of life. I want to reach out and remind the subject, Yes, it will end, that sickness is the fire that refines.
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it is very deep and i feel like you showed a part of yourself that not many ppl see. great write>
<3 lady jean -
awww hun
holy dirty pretty lol but guess that was the point of the contest so GOOD job
very personal write here, I know sometimes you feel like you're part of a diff world, while the rest of this world is running around you
very good job with this one and best of luck
TAsha
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