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The Eyes Have It

The gavel had fallen, the meeting began
Attendance was taken of all body parts
The eyes and the ears of all fellow man
As so it appears with their counterparts
The eyes and the ears were part of a clan
Ballots were cast; should they admit hearts?
The eyes said yes; the nose sort of ran
The hearts could impress with passion and arts
The eyes won the vote, the meeting began

 

 

 

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Prompt: write a rhyming poem about eyes

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  • penman gold member
    November 9
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    Excellent

    Oh my this was so funny. And such great rhyme. Congrats on the gold.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    October 12

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    smiles and then softly laughs..you na daughter are so very special to me....and so after all that's been said and done the heart once again wins out congrats Little Blue Star on your shiny gold trophy well done


  • awannabepoet
    October 4

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    And so they had a quorum and thus the eyes did see that the votes they cast were surely to be declared a winner you see.

    So it is with Amera's poetry, when would I ever leave her page without a pretty rhyme and a bobon as a treat.

    Amera

    Your quill still shines, may it rise up into the heavens and sprinkle a little poetic magic on the likes of me.


  • Summer52
    October 3

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    A brilliant write, my friend.
    Indeed A GOLD winner.


  • Desire gold member
    September 30

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    Oh My Word~

    Wow~ this is one Brilliant take on the prompt
    And in rhyme~ brought many chuckles

    Images ....Unique I must say
    Loved it!

    Congratulations on Your shiny!
    -throws confetti-
    Woot~

    Thank You for sharing Your Humor
    Best wishes in all You do
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • JinSays gold member
    September 29

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    this is wonderful.
    they should not admit hearts.
    and the nose running, loved that.
    Beautiful in gold, my friend. Congratulations.
    Love,
    jin


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 29
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    Yay.. I'm glad to see this wearing gold Sis..

  • eatSkittles
    September 29

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    Very interesting. I personally like poems that rhyme, so good job


  • PurpleSky
    September 29

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    this is one of the wierdest ive read lol. so if wierd or funny was your intention then you pulled it off. thought i'd take a look at whos most popular for now so congrats for being up there
    huggles
    Lena


  • nordicsky silver member
    September 28

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    I read this clever poem several times and was distracted by your avatar. I thought, she is a good representation of your imagination... never still, always jumping about. Your take on this prompt shows this brilliantly.

    I think the eyes would always take the heart’s side because they are so closely linked. So often, our emotions are driven by what we see.

    Thanks for posting this,
    Love, Peter


  • MarkiMalady.xo
    September 27

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    Wow!!
    This is completely c l e v e r!!
    Im Speachlesss!


  • Frances Nightengale
    September 27

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    Interesting. I very much enjoyed reading this.


  • RenyJameel
    September 25

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    cool

    Nice play of words....quite unique. it takes true talent to be able to write like this.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 25

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    Hehe.. I love the body parts woven in... I think the eyes would win too! This is such a cool play on words Sis! You always manage to show your talent and uniqueness


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 24

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    Yes, the eyes do have it as they surmise the sundry parts; relevant to the person, need and situation.

    Nicely penned my lyrical friend, and with your skill I cannot contend.

     

    All the best, 

    mj. 


  • klassy lassy
    September 24

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    I think this is golden wit and I love all the things combined in the meeting of mind. It strikes a true chord beyond the laughter, too. ~Karen


  • Longfella
    September 24

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    I like the nose running. That was funny! Does it have legs or does it run along on little nose hairs?


  • Hikari Lady
    September 24

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    Humorous and ingenious at the same time. I really liked and enjoyed the mixture of thoughts it gave me, somewhere between a wise thought and a funny one. Excellent write, dear, as always. ♥

    Love
    ~Noor


  • DesolatELifE
    September 24

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    Oh, I like the 'extra' line at the bottom!
    Very nice indeed.


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    September 24

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    Ha! What a clever twist on this phrase. A fantastic idea to take such a literal approach to the saying! Good luck in the contest.


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    September 24
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    Magic!!!


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 23

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    Two eyes open, third eye true!!!
    A wonderful little rhyme buddy.
    All the best.

    Ken


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 23

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    This is such a cute, humorous write. I am happy to have read this.

    Thank you for posting it tonight.

    Love, Buddy

  • Topnotchsy
    September 23
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    Fun, funny piece. Nice write!!


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 23

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    Eyes always win over no'ses ... a great write and in beautiful rhyme as only you can do.

    All the best in the contest

    Love
    Sue

  • Purrsanthema
    September 23

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    Delightful! Considering I'm an artist, doubly delightful! /I can't stop smiling, and I've read it several times!


  • ZachP silver member
    September 23

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    There's something in this that just made me smile, dear poet.
    What an amazing little ditty ; I envy you and your "mad skills", as the kids would say .
    Thanks for sharing with us. Best of luck in the contest.

    Blessed be,
    Zach Estel.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 23

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    This is nutty!!!

    Everyone knows the that eyes and ears never agree at these meetings

    Great stuff



    Jeff


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 23

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    I voted with the nose.

    (Great fun, Sis - very ingenious)


  • malmadre gold member
    September 23

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    Ingenious, I love how the rhyme just happens so easily for you. The setting is wonderful, stirring my imagination. I'm happy that the hearts got the vote.


  • PerVirtuous
    September 23

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    The eyes have it? Oh my, what a clever setup for that joke. I like it. I would have had the nose run rather than the ears, but then that is just me. A delightful little poem that put a smile on my face. Three bunnies for you!


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    September 23

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    Bravo
    I saw rhyme and thought...my oh my
    I know you can rhyme at the blink of an eye
    the orginality here is awesome; I wouldn't lie
    when reading your talented quill; I just need to sigh
    your words, flow, and rhyme sends me on a poetic high
    you made my smile today, but your sad writes make me cry
    you set a poetic standard for others, all we can do is try
    I should do some writing now because you made me spry
    until next time dear, Thy "Queen of Form" bye-bye

    Wish you the best in the contest
    Keep your talented quill dancing
    Much love my friend

    David


  • crivanea silver member
    September 23

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    lol!! ohh..i got such a great feel in this...ok i was thinking..board meeting..everyone glance around as the main speaker continues to talk..no one is really paying attention..but then the donuts arrive...and all the eyes turn toward it haha...love where you took it


  • StarEyes
    September 23

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    Again, you amaze me! You did a fantastic job on this one! I love it... And wow, what we do when we listen to, follow our hearts... Yikes, almost scary sometimes, but ohhhhhh so worth it!!
    Great job as always sis!

    Best of luck in this contest!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Faeryn
    September 23

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    Oh, Wow! The rhyming is awesome! Great poem, Amera.
    Love,
    Tay


  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 23
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    Lol fantastic. straight to the finalist list.
    Good luck,
    Joe

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