Among the slippery soap suds the dishes dance and sing
But my gaze is drawn upwards to another shiny thing
I watch the white globe rising above the tall tree tops
It brushes the clouds away, smiles and then seems to stop
You are a cheeky fellow coming out when it’s still light
You’re not supposed to show your face until the dark of night
He grinned a cheeky grin at me and even gave a wink
Then turned his face heavenward before I had time to blink
Where do you think you’re going rushing off at such a pace?
I’ve made a bet with the stars that I can beat the sun in a race
But no matter how fast he travelled he just couldn’t catch the sun
He couldn’t catch a single ray before this day was done
Then as the sky darkened and the stars blinked into view
I’m sure I heard them laughing, did you hear them too?
Author notes
I thought about writing a romantic poem but then thought where would I be if I were watching this............... most likely at my kitchen sink so this poem is exactly where my thoughts took me 
Hope you like it 
A contest entry
- Moonrise by rbruce.
3000 points, ended September 27, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Delightful!!!
I just love your poems!
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grampabob1946
Aww
thanks Bob this one was a bit of a giggle I'm so pleased you liked it, you are always so kind 
Cherry
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A charming write Cherry ! The moons
enchanting no matter where it's viewed
from ! A brilliant gem of a poem thank you ..
Best wishes & hugs , Friend Easy
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Ez Writer
Thanks so much Ez for stopping by and leaving such a lovely comment. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem
Cherry xxx
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The real poetry never ask when to come and never ask for a permission where to land. I like this place, your kitchen because as a poet I know how muse can play.
Very nice and vivid poem with simple but very nice rhyming. I like your unconventional stanza's pattern. Its flow free, it looks like it almost dance. Thank you for sharing your poetry with all of us.
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Sonja
Thanks so much for your lovely comment Sonja. As I wrote it I imagined reading it to the children and the pauses I would use to discuss things with them so that is why it has this staza formation, it seemed the most natural and effective
I have found that children love simple rhyming schemes and poetry that has a distinct rhythm to it. As I wrote I must admit I was wearing my teachers hat in many ways thinking about how I could use it with children across various ages and the discussions it could prompt across the curriculum.
I'm so pleased you liked it so much, thanks for reading
Cherry xxx
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It was easy because I write poetry and all other kind of stories for kids, myself
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Sonja
Brilliant Sonja! I'm going to have to revisit your page
Cherry xxx
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Strange that you chose the kitchen sink as a place to see the moon rise. The photo opportunity came from my kitchen window while at the sink. I went outside to get a clear shot. A lovely addition to washing dishes. Very well done. Good luck aand thanks for your entry.
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rbruce
Thanks for the lovely comment Bob so pleased you enjoyed my poem
The moon is a magical sight whatever way you look at it no matter where you are or what you are doing
Cherry xxx
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Very well written. A lovely poem that leaves a definate smile.
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My Chronos
Thanks again dear
Cherry xxx
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Poet
Another delightful piece of writing. Words brilliant that can only bring sunshine into the readrs heart. Excellent dear poet.
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Bob Fox
Awww Bob
Hello dear friend, I hope it brought a smile I couldn't resist writing a Children's poem here. Thanks so much
Cherry xxxx
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Nice job! I really loved this poem, its reallt well-written and a great read. Its funny too, nice job!!!
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BlackInk
Thank you so much BlackInk
I'm so pleased you enjoyed it
Cherry xxx
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Nice rythm and flow
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My Chronos
Thank you My Chronos, glad you liked it
Cherry xxx
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Wow simply beautiful, I have just been enjoying reading many of the poems in this contest, this one really captures my eye especially the stanza
You are a cheeky fellow coming out when it’s still light
You’re not supposed to show your face until the dark of night
He grinned a cheeky grin at me and even gave a wink
Then turned his face heavenward before I had time to blink
Great immaginary and simply blowing me away by your flow of words
, I wish you much luck in this contest and am glad I had the chance to read this poem, have a beautiful night xoox
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SheWolfNLust
Ahhh thank you so much for the lovely comment.
When I first saw the lovely picture of the moon I was tempted to write something but somehow it didn't seem to fit the bill this time so putting on my School teacher hat I wrote this
Cherry xxx
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