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shimmering night

The stars are twinkling in the sky,
 i'm feeling the magnetism as i look in your eyes.

 

The warmth of your lips caressing  my neck,

 the coolness of the rain drops making me wet.

 

The sensation of your hands in the light breeze,

 making me quiver with the way you tease.

 

Holding me close on this shimmering night,

 taking me into heavenly delights.

 

I'm hearing the call of natures sounds,

 making sweet melody's all around.

 

The glimmering of moonlight on your face,

 the feeling that were in a magical place.

 

A place where no other being exists,

 only me and you, and this mind blowing kiss...

 

As you hold me close on this shimmering night

 

 

 

 

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 18

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    Beautifully done...

    Wonderful rhythm, rhyme & flow in a soft, tender narrative that makes for a compelling read...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!

  • Haret5
    October 17

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    Well Done

    You used multiple senses in your poem. I don't have a real suggest but you might want to be a bit wary of typos like i'm. Great Job keep it up.


  • AndrianTimeswift
    September 24
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    Very nicely done. The rhyme and flow are very nice and the emotion shines through beautifully. Keep writing!


  • Barry Hodges silver member
    September 23

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    A fed very dodgy half-rhymes here:
    neck / wet !!!
    night / delights !!!!
    sounds / around !!!!
    exists / kiss !!!!

    Or maybe theu aren't actually SUPPOSED to rhyme????

  • tessa poetry
    September 23
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    I would change the fonts on this it was very difficult to read, but once I made it through.

    the rhyme was very smooth and I liked the poem very much. good job.

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