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[ Indescribable ]

The pain in my mind is retreating

Inspiration will no longer flow

The darkness that clouded my thoughts is gone

Leaving room for love and hope to grow

 

Expressing suffering on paper is easy

You cry, you weep, you write

But getting down joy and happiness is hard

I feel so nice, so weightless and light

 

How do I explain that my burden has lifted??

Not gone, but no longer crushing me down

I can’t find the words to describe my feelings

Like how I’m ready to smile instead of frown

 

Physically, I’m steadily sliding down hill

Yet somehow I still feel better than before

I know it won’t last, but for now life is good

Happiness goes with the tide like a shell on the shore

 

Tomorrow I might wake up depressed once again

But today I’ll live with my spirits high

I’ll live with these feelings that I can’t describe

Love

I never want to say goodbye.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • sgking123
    November 8

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    wow

    alternating between joy and depression can be normal as well as abnormal....abormal and dysfuntional it is when the time interval between the two receeds.........I loved this poem do visit me

  • bballer21
    November 3

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    wow! this really was a jaw opener! i loved every single word of it. i am glad to hear how happy you may be during the hardships in life, and i hope that you continue to feel this way don't "wake up depressed once again." tomorrow. amazing job, keep on writing!
    ~~ allie.


  • lemonhead
    September 26

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    Beautiful. -Most amazing poem ever!-
    It's very hard to write a poem that makes me feel happy, but you've succeeded greatly! Amazing.


  • Innocent Evil
    September 25
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    :D

    YES! this poem made me happy! I LOVE IT! I wish i can hug you right...NOW! I MISS YOU CORI!! We WILL meet again. and again... and again...


    • GiftedPsychosis gold member
      September 25
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      HAPPY! Virtual huggg please :-)
      I MISS YOU EVEN MORE! :-(
      Of course we'll meet again. I'm a stalker and I'm stalking you and stalkers always end up meeting their stalkey :-D


      • Innocent Evil
        September 26

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        *virtual hugg*
        how can you be my stalker when I stalk youu?? We shall meet and discuss our stalkiingness i see you!......in my head and right now I'm hugging you in my head yup

  • Tide
    September 25

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    :D

    I certainly agree. The only time I ever write poetry is when Im sad or upset... which is why I havent in a while. Even though the writing faucet has turned off, it's better than being sad and writing. I'd rather have you happy and dry <- IF that makes any sense, what so ever. haah
    ILOVEYOUCORIFORD! <3
    great poem.


    • GiftedPsychosis gold member
      September 25
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      This is so awesome! We're both happy. At the same time. Hahah :-)
      Megan, you're my best friend, of course it makes sense. I've learned Megantalk :-D


  • Akarian silver member
    September 24

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    Freaking awesome, and you just described what I've been trying to do for the path month at least. It really is hard to write happy stuff when all I'm used to is non-happy stuff. Great job!


    • GiftedPsychosis gold member
      September 25

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      I had to force myself to start this, though I had it stuck in my head. Once I started though, it came pretty easily :-)


  • lost-angel
    September 23

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    love love, and totally get it and your background etc is amazing!


    • GiftedPsychosis gold member
      September 23
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      Thank you! I was wondering whether anyone would get it or if it was just confusing :-P Glad to know someone does! It's a nice feeling :-)


      • lost-angel
        September 23
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        it happens to me too, can never write when im happy, lol, never feel i'll do it justive..and im also feeling the happines and love

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