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My Mom

your more then i could ever ask for in a mother
you give up so much for me and at times i am blind to see
i know you want whats best for me even if its looking me right in the face
and the time when you want me the most i cant do anything for you
my heart beats every second that i am not with you
tears running down my face just thinking bout you and how iwish  to be with you

my mother you will always be
my friend and someone that i can confide in
i love you mom
and i hope your day is special as you are

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  • LadyOfFate
    November 13
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    This is a good poem. shows how much you love your mother, but it also shows your hurry to write it. mainly this part:
    "and the time when you want me the most i cant do anything for you
    my heart beats every second that i am not with you
    tears running down my face just thinking bout you and how iwish to be with you"
    you should take your time and correct the typos you made. it will make the poem seem that much better. good luck. laters


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 4

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    This is very good and very moving. I really enjoyed reading this. It was short and too the point. Anyways. This was nicely written. Keep up the really good work..!!