Dreadful instances of my life
are captured and trapped
to be remembered
but who says that I want to be reminded
There is no excape
Humanity has rapped my mind,
my thoughts
and my soul
Its as if I have no control
This photo,the one of my life
is not worth a thousand words
The suns rays shines black
and its beams are as cold
as a winters breeze
The moon is deceased
My shadows of pain and sorrow
shades the light of my happiness and joy
The ground is dry and yields nothing but
blood that has been spilled in the dark portions of my life
This photo, the one of my life
scorches my spirit
devours what is left of me
consumes my pride
and demolishes my dignity
I wonder how my picture would differ
If people judged me based on my personality
and not my past
Through all of the imagery can you tell what Im talking about? Should I have just went out and said what I wanted to say or was the imagery good enough?
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Great write! Every poem i read of yours is so great and full of raw emotion and imagery! I love reading your stuff!
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Thanks man!
Thanks. Lots of people mainly comment on the romance instead of seeing the emotion that I try to capture and place into my poems. Thanks again!
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Simply amazing
wow simply amazing, I very much enjoyed your poem and find it is full of imaginary and There are so many parts I love in this poem, the words flow smooth and I just totally love it, My favorite part is
The moon is deceased
My shadows of pain and sorrow
shades the light of my happiness and joy
The ground is dry and yields nothing but
blood that has been spilled in the dark portions of my life
I really can feel the emotion here, great job and well done xoxo
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Thanks
Thank you, I havent wrote in a while. Im trying to find my way back. Thanks for the encouragement. I will try and come up with something hopefully better than this. I still cant get over the poem that you wrote that I commented on. I printed in out :-) !!!! I loved it!! Thanks again. You keep up the good work as well!!
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A MASTERPIECE!!!
a masterpiece indeed! girl where do u get these words from ... ur emotions, imagery metaphor ,personification man i'm spellbound! i htink you made it clear who and what you are really talking abt in the last stanza.... ppl often judge b4 the get to know us... some take advantage of our weaknesses our kindness and most of all our heart full of life and love!! this is one of the best bestest and im serious best poems i've ever read wow! Q babyg u really did it this time... you are getting there and trust me u will do great if you continue!!!!
A GREAT MASTERPIECE!!!
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Great
You are so great, you dont just comment on my poems but you always relate it to the real world situations. You are so marvelous. I always look foward to your words of encouragement!!!!
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