A flower in the morning
Moistened by the dew
Opens it petals to the sun
By midday, it is in full bloom
Basking in all it's glory
Toward dusk it folds it's petals down
Reflecting on its day in the sun
And as for man, his day in the sun
Lives on in the deeds he has done
And in the lives he has touched
Whose reward shall surely come
Author notes
Pic found at www.deviantart.com by_LilMaddy
A contest entry
- Short and sweet by Tuesdays-child.
900 points, ended October 6, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Well done!
I like the way you described the flower in the sun and then compared it to a man's day in the sun..nicely done, Sis!
Best of Luck in this contest!!!
Big Hugs
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Love,
Your Sis,
♥ Maureen
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So straight-forward, so clear,
the comparison so visual,
the flower, mankind--
touching lives.
A perfect "moral" of the story...
M-C
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I love this poem! It is so pretty and well written, with such a great message! I particularly love the last four lines.
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I do like this. Thanks for sharing it. I needed this at this time.
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Great poem! It kind of reminded me of the second half of Psalm 103
Which is, btw, one of my favourite Psalms. The imagery was beautiful, and coupled with the concept at the end, it made for a wonderful write. Thanks for entering - I really enjoyed your piece!
TheCSIgurl
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Such a poetic view showing how history will define how we lived. Nice flow and rhythem to it.
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awww i like it...especially the way you made it so much more personal in the last stanza..good message..profound..and i love the pic sis
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Well said, good poet sister.
Your nature poems are right up there in the Hall of Beautiful Poetry. 
I think you will write poetry in Heaven someday.
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Excellent
What a great write. Oh my you did so well with this one. Best of luck in the contest
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