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In This Place

Silently I float on my sea of despair
Aching from the agonizing pain
I want to exact my revenge
Yet, what would that gain

Screaming, loudly, inside myself
Knowing that nobody can hear
I crave to feel alive once more
But I dare not let anyone near

Begging the nightmares to end
Pleading for just one restful night
I pray for a little bit of peace
As I'm losing what's left of my light

Crying untill my tears run dry
Seeing your haunting face
Oh, how I need some kind of sign
That there, actually, is beauty in this place

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  • aceray
    October 1

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    All you need to do is look in a mirror! Wherever you are, wherever you go will there always be beauty!

    My heart goes out to you ms Dawn whose very name means "coming of the light, coming of the hope"!

    Know this, you will never be alone!

    Rey


    • DenyMyLove
      October 1
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      Thanks Rey!!!! You always know the right thing to say to make me feel better!
      ~DAWN~


  • February.Memories
    September 28

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    I like the language used in here.It's a sad piece with a serene feeling in it.I like the turn your poems get in the last stanza.It brings something positive to the reader knowing that she cried and searched for a sign.
    Only she could understand those signs.
    Good use of the language.The imagery makes it easier to understand an feel it.


  • Marjorie Marie
    September 27

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    This breaks my heart. Well written and to the point. I keep rereading it and feel a new sense of despair each time.