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Missive from the Earth Below

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I don’t understand these sophisticated philosophies.
You write of concepts so far above me
I think you must be in heaven
as you haven't been here with me
on earth in a long time.

Maybe I'm simply too slow for you,
being a creature of this world.
Yes, I am an earthly, earthy woman,
not given to pondering man as whirling particles
or pieces of a broken vessel.
In the end I am simply contending with
ordinary matters of living,
which are often too complex for me anyway.

As it is, my hands are full --
difficult relationships,
unrealized ambitions,
looming fears,
lasting grief,
loss of many
little things that once sustained me.

I am as I always was --

a creature seeking warmth and light.
I remember a time when you used to
visit me here in Rome

as the ordinary Romans do.
You were not Euclid in those days.
You were an earthly, earthy man
using all your weight and power
to draw me close,
clutching at my back,
your very breath
was all the communication you needed.
You shared your heart, your fears,
and dear God! how you made me laugh,
how you made my body roar.

We got a little older, that's all.
Then you got the idea that
we were too old for "all that stuff"

and you left me behind.


Now you are all intellect, all theory,
making no sense at all.
I can take it for a while, but
in the end I must be touched
by someone loved and loving.

 

I got a little older, that's all.

I didn't drop down dead.

Nobody came by to make me

turn in my woman card.

No one shut off my heart,

my body,

my soul.


Come down from the heavens.
Step through for a moment and speak directly to me.
Look in my eyes.
What good is a florid philosophy of life to me?
I am an earthly, earthy woman.
I need to live,
not talk about what it means to live.


I don’t understand the erudite explication of love
in the absence of loving.





 

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  • deercatcher
    September 29

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    This is the test of mature love; to work through the inevitable changes. Sacrificial giving of what the partner needs and reciprocity are the solutions so many never find. We shout at each other about our own needs... our own hurts.... and no one goes first to do the bandaging.


    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 29
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      Thanks for reading and commenting. I agree. The easiest thing in the world is to lose a relationship...the hardest thing in the world is to keep one alive.

      CM


  • Starswhispers silver member
    September 25

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    This is a jewel I love your direct approach and all the explanation about travelling the road of love and how even with the best connection people fall apart because they choose different path at least temporarily, I love how you argue about living within reach and in real life as platonic relationship can make us feel so unsecure. So nicely done you have a lovely poetical voice.

  • Tercarro
    September 25

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    A must read for anyone

    This is a must read for anyone who wants to take a journey and see everything on the way. I find myself consistantly cold when I read your work but it is that sense of chill that grips me and makes me think, why have I written so much grap for all these years instead of writting what chills me too. Thanks you for showing me an alternative dimention.

    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 29
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      You say this, and yet you have written some pieces that are very substantial. In any case, if we are to create meaningful, intimate poetry that brings forth an emotional response from our readers, we all have to dig a little deeper. It can also be said that the bulk of my work is too heavy for many. I just want to offer something bold, stripped bare of pretense and very much me. Your feedback indicates I have succeeded, and so, thank you very much.

      Camille


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 22

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    you do a wonderful job in this piece of arguing for life lived over theory and beautifully illustrate the case in those great closing lines. i really love the use of "earthly, earthly woman" as to me it illustrates the need to connect mind and body, meeting where the heart resides.

    a treat to read.

    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 24
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      Thank you, Rick. It always means so much when something I've written is understood. Obviously, given the nature of your relationship with your wife, keeping love vital is not a problem for you.
      Sincerely,
      Camille


  • tomisb
    September 22
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    There is a sardonic edge to the language. The imagery is not so much an explanation but a clarification of contrasts, doors closing and fears growing.

    Touch is sacred. Poignant and fearsome for many, it holds both the answer and revelation.

    Perhaps this is why women often terrify the man on the quest for edification. Truth is not and escape from the material world. Sex is about gratification and celebration, but as one grows wiser it is no longer a service to the polishing of egos. It becomes to the fearful another scale to be weighed upon and found wanting.

    Here to, you have revealed the wisdom of the woman. The vision, the sight that so terrifies the man who is not sure that in his nakedness he has value and cannot hear a woman's love for the clamor of his own banging around in mental closets where he is sure is lacking is so prominent.

    Love,
    Tom B.

    • Camille Morin gold member
      September 24

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      Thank you for this most articulate and generous comment. I appreciate it especially because I had serious misgivings about publishing it. I have been picking at this piece for nearly 2 years and it still does not feel complete to me. Also, I worry that I am overkilling the point. Performance gives it more of a sense of being a finished work, but the goal, of course, is that it could also stand on its own.
      Gratefully,
      Camille

      • tomisb
        September 24

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        Another Note

        The hardest thing for any artist is to declare a work done. Nothing is ever perfect and we, the creators, know every sore and aching word and how by all that we measure as true, there could be more and it could be...

        There comes a time when we must accept that this is finished. The idea, thought might need another frame or voice, but that is another piece. This one is excellent and it is done.
        Love,
        Tom B.

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