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The river



A shallow spring of innocence
Erupts in gushing streams
The Watermark on scattered grass
A canvas made of earth

Cascading through the forest floor
Under shadows of the trees
lie fecuhn interlacings
of tributary dreams

Immured within the darkness
Cold waters draped in white
Makes maelstrom of the tacit
Bound by swelling shores

A waterfall, a riverbend
Stagnant pools, the rocky edge
A Seething rush of blue
Capricious as the moon

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  • tidoubleguher
    October 30

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    Wow. This is so very impressive for someone only 16! Your vocabularly is superb, and your overall imagery is absolutely stunning! Very nice.