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Stories

Is your life but a storybook
Invented, embellished and only
Based on a true story?

In your mind
Is it more eventful, exciting and tragic than
Things could ever really be?

Does your imagination guide your memories
Guard your reality
And keep you interested in your own book?

Suddenly everything makes sense
Yet I can’t seem to think any less of you
Because anyone can do things, but I like the way you SAY things

Fictional or otherwise

Author notes

This one could definitely be better....Usually I slave over a poem for hours before I would ever dream of putting it on the internet....Today though, I'm trying not to be a perfectionist because I think perfectionism kind of impedes inspiration....I CAN FIX IT LATER.

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    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Crazy-Love
    September 29

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    This was a great write really! I can't really see anything worth changing. I Like that you are just going with your inspiration! I love writing and letting it all flow outta me. Though of course there are good time to sit and go over poems again and again.

    This had a really deep meaning. It was thought provoking for me at least.
    Keep up the work!
    I'm excited to see what else just comes from your inspiration =))

    Crazy-Love♥

  • humble1
    September 23

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    nicely writen

    i wouldnt change it, things you write as you feel seems so much more easier to read-like you can feel it. keep writing you have a gift


  • Melee Vau gold member
    September 22

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    don't change a thing

    I know heaps of people like this - they are frustrating and intriguing, and sometimes you just gravitate to their flame. great poem, you have a gift!

  • jake x x x
    September 22
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    this is amazing poem with a awsome meaning


  • Emperor MAR
    September 22
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    I think this is good and really captures meaning in its words.


  • silverscent gold member
    September 22

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    I like it the way it is.
    Sometimes a rough around the edges approach can make the piece more effective, and I think that's what this poem does.
    I'm sure we all know someone who this poem can relate to, so I think it will be a hit with many readers.

    Thanks for sharing.


  • Evinde
    September 22

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    The style works well with your theme and ideas. don't be afraid of showing what you feel even to the person you love. emotions are emotions, hidden or shown.


  • AlexandraHamilton
    September 22

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    I really like the way this is written. It made me smile to read; I think it's sweet, even though it's about embellishing the truth. It's unique in that respect. Well said

  • writeonhorses
    September 22

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    don't change this too much. it will ruin your original intent. i really like it! and no, I think it's fine for ur gf, not too personal. it holds a truth for anyone. my fave line is

    Because anyone can do things, but I like the way you SAY things

    Fictional or otherwise


    amazing ending. lovin it


  • KatherineAnne
    September 21

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    I love this. No fixing is needed.

    "Suddenly everything makes sense
    Yet I can’t seem to think any less of you
    Because anyone can do things, but I like the way you SAY things"

    These are my favorite lines (:

    Thank you for sharing (:

    -Kati Anne


  • usually-untitled
    September 21

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    why fix it?
    i like it as it is.
    if you polish them too much they lose a lot of clarity and truth, i think.
    (i'm one to be talking about truth...)

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